Tight [lipped] and tongue tied with all the things that have been left (un)said.
Read through the l.i.n.e.s baby && b r e a k all the rules for what YOU want.
Your absolute idea of {{truth}} was just an [honest] answer from a lying whore.
Hang me out to -dry- && leave me lying less than *sober* on the bathroom floor.
I know you'll be back, you always come back to the start.
I guess this is where logic is suposed to make a scene...
You know that 2+2=4, but you + me = disaster, baby....
Although, you just know just |how| much I love a good disaster.
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Your absolute idea of {{truth}} was just an [honest] answer from a lying whore.
I simply fell in love with this line.
I don't know if I really care for the title though, nothing personal. I think the line:
you + me = disaster, baby....
might make a slight better title. But it matters not.
I thought the overall piece could have been a bit longer or detailed but it was creative.
Thanks for the entry
~elizabeth~
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such anguish but the point was made...... congrats on the trophy.
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thank you!
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i love this
youre a finalist!
thanx for entering and good luck
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YAY!!!!!
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Rather good, yes. Not the best - I won't lie, I didn't particularly favor this - but many of the words stick out with rich clarity. Good luck to you in the contest.
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An interesting message and style
Lots of vivid imagery... but i think the poetry is polluted by all the inappropriate abbreviation...
love
clay
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I love it! It was good. I like the title and it was just a good piece. I like the less than sober part. hehe. well talk to you later.
xoxoxo
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Amazing. This is the best thing I've read in a long long time that hasn't been written by one of my favorite authors. The first line especially got me, and the rest was just as good. I absolutely loved it.
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thank you very much!
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