I'M WRITING YOU this letter to make things very clear
YOU HAVE YOUR slimy arms wrapped around someone who's dear!
YOU STRETCH YOUR poisonous tentacles throughout our land
THERE ARE EVEN those "SPAWNS OF EVIL" who lend a helping hand.
YOU MAKE EMPTY promises that you can't keep
THERE IS ONLY pain that makes a heart weep.
I WILL NOT come to you with tears or pleas
"NO WAY", I'LL just tell you what I need.
THE KIND, LOVING, truthful husband give back
THE WAY HE was, before there was crack!
THE FATHER OF three son's in need
NOW REALLY, HOW hard can that be?
YOU TAKE AND take until there is no more
WELL, THE OPEN invitation is revolked I'm slamming the door!
YOU ARE A soul-less thing, dark as night
IF YOU INSIST on staying, "YOU'RE IN FOR A FIGHT!"
I AM A simple woman I don't ask for much
BUT MY MAN again, you will never touch!
I'LL MAKE YOU a promise to never bother you again
THE DEAL IS: Give back my man and let me win!
Author notes
option 2 quotes (sencond quote-losing a loved one to evil before death)
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Dont have much time. better comment later.
KytKitsune
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I understand this struggle, and think you did a great job with this write. Thanks for entering the contest!
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wow you go girl... that is sooo totally awesome... thanks for sharing this.... holy cow... hehe... great job... good luck in contest...!
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Yeah this was one of my first poems...I was soooo mad!!
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A deep write, amidst all the metaphors and the straight-forwardness.
The caps must be to emphasise your hurt towards COCAINE, but I agree with Birgitte.
Losing some to evil, in this case cocaine, must be hard for you. But judging from this write, you're such a strong woman.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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Thanks for your comment on "My Letter To Cocaine"
When I wrote this my husband had just spent all our money once again on cocaine and I really wanted to kill all the dealers I could find...but of course I couldn't do that so I got it all out in this poem. The caps were the RAGE I was feeling!
Thanks again
darlintlc
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EXCELLENT AND HEART FELT
Yes cocaine is truly like walking with the devil himslef for as long as it has a hold of anyone they follow his leed . If not fought back he works on taking the soul which fork in the road will you take
the one to live or ----------. You have to keep off of it before you will be able to see love once again for while you are on it the devil looks through your eyes and he has no mercy for anyone that gets in his way
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I have to say that the capital parts just threw me off. Looking aside that, I find this piece very sad. I don't know many who's on cocaine, but I can imagine how hard it must be for you to loose your husband/man to it. Very painful!
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Oh yes, this is so painful to read, can imagine how it is going through this, seeing someone you love go by the way of this drug addiction; changing from a loving husband and father to a man who can't hink of anything but but his next fix and how to get it. Nothing else seems to be of interest to him. Think your sentiments are well expressed, easy to read and understand what's being said in these lines. Stick to your guns; he doesn't need to take all of you down along with him - he has to get out and stay out until clean or until death takes him on an overdose. Sad but true.
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