Those minds were there
Laughing within the breeze.
Freelance whistling in the space around
on the ground
and in places of interesting nests.
Upwards towards the Everest mountain,
moonlight on your beautiful languages ... who's art
lights in color dances
Same sense as time
as it floats to the south.
Mesmerized in sensations,
it's energies energizing many moments
as that same time slips by
un-noted and blended in.
Please tell me what you think
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Fresh
Hello there Nathaniel.
I like the way you use language in this piece, it is fresh and refreshing and not just a list of generic cliches.
Sometimes it's more important in a poem to be evocative than accessible and that's the main reason why I enjoyed your poem so much. It got me to thinking and that's got to be a good thing, right?
Have an awesome day,
BJ.
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good work!!!!!!!!!!! this is pretty cool and i am lost between thoughts and the end of the poem
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i like it its uplifting
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Good
The passion and heart felt emotions within your words capture your heart with their strength of truth while devastating the soul with their sadness. This is a unique piece of poetic prose, the poem has very good flow and imagery, it was my pleasure to read and review...
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I like this for it has me lost deep in thought near the finish, well written, and nice imagery. Love the metaphors here!
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This one reads to me like love lost. Nicely done.. aloha to you from this side of paradise found.. alisa
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i love the images. great. thanks for sharing
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I like the images this poem paints in my head. I also like it because it's quite unusual, something a bit special.
I love the message that it's putting across, and please correct me if I'm wrong, but I get the impression that it is about beautiful things happening all the time, and people failing to notice them? Lol that's how I interperated it, anyway
"moonlight on your beautiful languages ... who's art
lights in color dances" stunning.
Well done!
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