Red Bulls & yegger mixed
She wasn't made for this
Fuck your melancholy kiss
I know you don't give a shit
You've wasted my heart
& now I'm going to fade like a rock star
Tearing the pictures off the wall, into shreds
What exactly were those pills I was fed?
It doesn't matter, I only remember you sucked in bed
So steal the chill from my breath
& you can keep excuses
Because they are fucking usless♥
This is my bottle, my little lullaby tonight
I'm going to drink to your demise
Did you forget-dating me will be suicide
& baby, I don't lie
Table top dances
Searching for new romances
You don't get second chances
With me!
Enjoy your three dollar whore
I'm worth a little more♥
I'm as strong as a Marine in the corps
& I'm going to wage my wasted heart war
& I'll fade out like a fucking rock star
Baby, you should've never bruised my heart
A contest entry
- glitter whores, wasted hearts, & fuckin' rockstars by TheStupidLamb.
700 points, ended September 13, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round #1 (enter away) by takemypainaway.
390 points, ended March 22, 2008, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
you relate?
Comments
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INCREDIBLE i can soo relate!
wonderfull -
"This is my bottle, my little lullaby tonight
I'm going to drink to your demise
Did you forget-dating me will be suicide
& baby, I don't lie"
This line just seemed to jumped out at me the most, though it was all so wonderfully written. ^-^ Excellent piece. =] Truly amazing.
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Whoaaa, this is incredible. I loved how you wrote this. It holds so much anger and everything in it, and I lalalovvved it. Your words were so intense. Definitely one of the most powerful I've read in a longgg time. AMAZING♥
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wonderful
Wowww, this is great!! I loved how emotional and forceful this was...your choice of words definitely brought out the intensity of the poem. It's honestly one of the most powerful poems I've ever read! It was simply amazing.
Great job! To have so much talent is a gift.
<3
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Wow
Um can't say I can totally relate to this poem but I have been broken down to the point of nothingness and just rebuilt a crumbly foundation only to be broken down once again. any ways this poem is wickedly awesome & I am not suprised at all why you won Gold because this poem really stands out and it is just incredible. any ways your words flow with such beauty & grace and the pent up anger you placed into this poem really made it stand out that much more. excellent job here Sarah & keep it up
Signed, Paul 
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awesome!!!
i can relate that and that we all r great poets! don't u think? bye,starfire
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i f**** adored this!!!
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fuck yeah
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Deliciously fashionable.
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I loved this write so much one of the best writes I have read in ages, and this piece had a lot of meaning in it also. Well deserved gold my friend.
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"This is my bottle, my little lullaby tonight
I'm going to drink to your demise"...loved this!!
Love the attractive images,your way with words and description itself...
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wow this freakin rocks sweet
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oh man....do you have some talent. i havent read poetry like this in ages, im glad ive found you on here!
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hehe i loved this revenge one of my favorites
lol and the MARINE coment lol my hubbys a marine
so funny you did an amazing job with this
go kick some ass rockstar...
thank you for entering!!
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Great poem, the flow was good and the words were great you have a talent though i am sure this you knew nice wirte,
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I Really Like This You Have Really Good Poems
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thank you♥
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wow
you are truly amazing, keep going, i wanna rock your world
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that's an awesome poem. i feel like crap to my ex boyfriend too
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yeah--my ex was a dirtbag-and many other things.. im just a magnet for bad guys
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good write. I can see why you won the first place.
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x] thanx it was sort of my fuck him poem♥
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oooh... loved it. it was awesome.
'all I remember is you sucked in bed'
heh, I'd love to say that to Karl to get back at him, after all he's done.
Even though it's not true, he doesn't know that.
Hurt me, hurt him.
Put a pick of his penis on myspace, or say it's small =]
ok I'll shut up.
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I fuckin love it.
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very emotional poem my friend (just a quick hint core is spelled "corps" but is pronounced the same way) it took me years to figure it out.
But this poem is so full of emotion and heartfelt expression. great write
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this is fucking awesome! i don't usually like rhyme but i love this. luck in the contest
-lys
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"Table top dances
Searching for new romances
You don't get second chances
With me!
Enjoy your three dollar whore
I'm worth a little more♥
I'm as strong as a Marine in the core
& I'm going to wage my wasted heart war
& I'll fade out like a fucking rock star
Baby, you should've never bruised my heart"
-great lines
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Oh, most def. a finalist! Loved this so much, it was exactly was I was looking for!! ♥
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thanx i was inspired by the title♥
havent written in a few so-thanx for your contest
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