Dolorous fills my life,
tangled in thoughts.
I have hidden emotions,
that surrounds me.
Feeding on my divided heart,
knots fill my belly.
It's as if I never saw you before,
quaking and in a faint heartbeat.
Under these circumstances,
I surrender to your domain of rue.
Author notes
blondone
Prompt was picture inspire the eyes expressed great sorrow and regret
Bonus one I jump started off Trista poem Painted Dreams I read the sorrow in the write
Bonus two I think this image was on your computer cause A friend drew it for you
I wrote this one short and to the point of the deep sorrow and regret one has for they own self I liked the word dolorous and thought it was a great name for her...
A contest entry
- The Random Rounds - Round 7 by Frodofan.
1670 points, ended September 19, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dolorus by blondone
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Dolorous by blondone
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Good job. I liked the use of the word "Dolorous" because it resembles the name "Dolores." It was a good play on words! What I also liked about this (and think is fairly rare on AP!) is that you seem to have looked at the picture and instead of mocking it or trying to encourage hope, you felt the persons sadness and seem to understand it. Very neat.
But, your guess is incorrect. I drew the picture myself.
But you get 10 bonus points for connecting your poem to another contestant's.
Title - 10
Style - 7
Form - 9
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 10
Originality - 9
Reaction - 8
Rules - 10*
Makes sense - 10
Enjoyable - 8
bonus: 10
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Interesting piece. I like the word "dolorous."
Thanks for entering.
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Nice job with the picture.
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