the spirits shine their light on me,
so i can find what some cannot see,
the perfection and elegance in love,
all this and more from the heavens above,
the darkness's gloom,
the brightness of the sun,
this thing called love could way a ton,
but if held right on ones shoulders,
you cannot feel the wait of hells boulders,
its a peaceful feeling from the heavens above,
when we know we are surrounded by love!
Author notes
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A contest entry
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This was very good. Just I would fix that typo in the title! It had a very nice rythem to it and it was nice! I especcially love this phrase "hells boulders". This was a nice poem... but not exactly what I was looking for! Great job though!
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This is a very nice poem, great flow and unique! Just one thing that made me pause, "wait" should be "weight." Anyway, very good poem and I am glad you entered it. Thank you.
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lovely flow to this, very well written. Good luck!
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lovely flow to this, very well written. Good luck!
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oh very well wrighen and emotional. i quite like this poem
ENGRA
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