Her eyes were open
yet they felt like thery were closed
and it smelled like human flesh
when it starts to decompose.
the smell was putrid
and she was straped down in chains
her body was cold and wet
yet, inside,it couldn't have rained
She heard screaming behind her,
which rang like obnoxious bells
and she began to wonder,
did i die and go to hell?
then the lights flicker on
and she took a look around
there was blood on table
and a head on the ground.
where the hell am i?
as as she shoke in fear.
"Shut up you bitch,
i make the rules around here."
She could see this figure,
but only somewhat.
it was too hard to see,
her eyes were swollen shut.
She could make out something shiny
but she couldn't tell what,
until she felt it pierceing
deep into her gut.
she screamed in pain
cause it wasnt a fatel blow,
but then again, thats what he wanted
for her to die slow.
She screamed so hard
that her lungs collapsed,
and that was what he wanted,
for her to be dead at last...
Author notes
its been a long time since i wrote something with gore in it, so i hope you like it
In a list
A contest entry
- Sick and Twisted 7 by Acidanthra.
700 points, ended September 12, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark like my soul by screamin2u.
525 points, ended September 29, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
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When I shut my eyes I can't stop seeing it!!! I won't be able to sleep for a while! Real good write! Super imagery! Wonderfully dark!
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I really love this and I love how sick and twisted it is. The imagery is really wonderful. Good luck in the contests.
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W00T!
THIS IS AWESOME! It sounds like something from Hostel or something like that. Very sick, twisted and disturbed! You did great. Kudos and i wish you luck in the contest
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I really like this write! I would do a spell check to get the typos out. I would make it gorier ( blood, internal organs, mucus, brains, etc... ) and who is it exactly that is torturing you?
Overall I would say this is a great write for not writing in awhile!
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yea it has been a long time
but then again its been a few since youve written anything! so yay for writing something
im gunna see if i can think of anything in my heavily medicated state rightnow
lylas
CureMyTragedy♥
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