Forgive me my brother
I've let you down
I can't be your angel
sheltered and proud
Forgive me my sister
my will has been broken
your younger indentical
strayed far from your trail
Forgive me my father
our connection is frayed
expectations shattered
but I love you all the same
And Forgive me my mother
I've left your feathered wing
flown the coop in impatience
now I am hurt...now I am lost
Please tell me what you think
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loved it madison. you're an exxcelent writer. you speak from ur heart thats waht i luv bout ur poems, most poems nyways lol but good write.
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Hmmm
Very emotional, I felt like I connected with you on this. Very sad and depressing. The words sumptiously flowed out without negativity, great writing.
On a more personal note, you know your friends are always here. Love you Madi.
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I really like this poem alot. There is a lot of heart felt honestity in it. I know the feeling of thinking you have let others down. I know all too well. I feel as if I lie to people daily for choices I have made and ones that I do not admit to anyone. Take care and keep up this great writing.
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mads. again. ur a genious when writing. and dudes. i know your sorrry for things you've done. as we all are. but at least you mean it. i mean this was a great piece, and im here. always have been and always will be.. just how great friends are. lol.. psh but nah. i'll talk to you later chica. luv ya!
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I like this a lot as a poem, but since ik what you mean by all of it i see it diffrently then beautiful expressioin and word choice.
I know your sorry, and it's hard not to be sorry ik that better then a lot of people, but don't be even though that's hard to say and do. Being more then an "angel" and beating down your own path isn't anythign to be sorry for...you should be proud for that. With your mother....you gotta leave it sometime....maybe you feel you left too soon, and your father....i'm really not sure what to say about that:/
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