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.casualties.

My stomach
plummets
to the bottom of my feet
the thought of you
sudden and
violent
an Explosion
that catches me
mid-thought
mid-breath
mid-everything

and I am dazed
still blinded by the blast
and groping in my feet
while the second round is fired

oh, you are a weapon
you are brutal
the mass distraction of millions
and the destruction of one

oh, you are toxic
radioactive
the barren fields of war
follow in your wake
and I-
merely a casualty
strewn about that place

And so I lie
battered
broken
breathing the smoke
of your absence
Here among the wreckage
Not the fire
of your presence
it brings heat
but not a
single
spark
of light

Oh, you are a weapon
you are brutal
the mass distraction of millions
and the destruction of one

Oh you are toxic
radioactive
the barren fields of war
follow in your wake
and I-
merely a casualty
strewn about this place.

Compare this with .mid-everything. This is sort of a second version.

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  • skyyward
    September 8, 2007
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    bellisimo

    you hit the one - bulls-eye


  • The CheshireKat
    September 6, 2007
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    last bit is good, but i favor the first one.