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My September Sadness

Cool breeze of autumn marks
the ending of summer.
Leaves change from lush green
to an array of hues born of deaths palette.
A beautiful reminder of you,
of all that is gone
Though this is my favorite passing of time
it houses the anniversary of your ending.
An ephemeral of beauty,
an imbrued sadness that does not wane.

I've spent my days scouring the land
in search of a loveliness that matched you.
Left to roam this savage garden alone
with only traces to imply that you existed.
As fall advances over the hemisphere
a consciousness of days passed
embraces me with its' beauty and bereavement.

Author notes

My best friend was killed on September 20th 2003 yet fall is still my favorite time of year..was both of ours..I miss him deeply.

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  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    September 12

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    This is very beautifully written. I loved your tribute to your friend. I am sure you endure much sadness this time of year. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest


  • Florida Sunshine
    September 5

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    Touching

    September is the beginning of fall; the time that winter will soon follow. As we think about nature and the changes come. Your poem is beautiful written, and a wonderful tribute for your friend.

    You immediately caught my attention with your opening:

    "Cool breeze of autumn marks
    the ending of summer.
    Leaves change from lush green
    to an array of hues born of deaths palette.
    A beautiful reminder of you,
    of all that is gone
    Though this is my favorite passing of time "

    Thank you for submitting this in my contest, I do appreciate you allowing me to read something that is very personal and intimate. I hope to judge as soon as possible at the close of the contest. Thank


  • MJ Forgives
    August 29

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    Wow when I read your poem I felt like I was under a spell. I really love your poem. It captured my heart and my attention. Wonderful job and thanks for your entry.
    -Jess


  • LonelyAngel
    August 27

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    I am sorry to hear of your friend, your friend was lucky to have someone as special as you. You have shown how you felt in bravery and in words. September, it is a nice time of year and you have shown ow you feel so,

    Well done,
    Thank you,
    Good luck.

    xYx


  • realist07
    September 25, 2007
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    very nice work very nice flow nice choice of words nice imargy and discription very nice work


  • Nostalgia
    September 21, 2007
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    Beautiful.


  • MahoganyFlow
    September 17, 2007

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    Although this is sad, it did have some wonderful imagery and a nice flow to it. Hope you got some much needed release from writing this. Most of the time good poetry comes from experincing pain. This is a perfect example!


  • realist07
    September 15, 2007

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    iright nature and imargy Cool breeze of autmn marks the ending ofsummer. nice imargy nice flow good work


  • AddictiveTRUTH
    September 10, 2007

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    So sorry for your loss

    still you keep a positive look on life and wen Seasons change. Great write, hope all continues to go well with you. I commend you for sharing shuch a heartfelt piece.

    Ephiphany


  • heygoo
    September 6, 2007

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    I am so sorry for your loss. This line really spoke to me through your poem: "traces to imply that you existed" This is a lovely write full of sadness, remembering and hope in the future.

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