A coveting eye,
Insatiable, mine,
Unconditional eyes on me.
Lingering obsessions
of past regret
longing to be free.
Endless desire,
forbidden fixation,
a sullen life of rue,
censored emotion,
implicit confession,
depress the promise of you.
First time really writing or sharing. Comments?
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Very good
Smooth and very nice indeed -
Good write here
It flowed very well and spoke in volumes -
Excellent write
Very well done piece here
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I like the wording you used with this piece. It worked out wonderfully, as did the metaphores also. Good work with this one!
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Really nice. I love your use of metaphors and you seem to have some really good diction as well.
~/-- Desolate Dignitary --\~
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Awesome!
Very well written. Can definately feel the emotion emitting from the words. Keep up the great word!
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it made me think of my ex who i went out for a long time and then sum thing happen it reminds me keep it up
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