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Neglect

                                                                           Awake:

                                                         the sound of the bellowing sky.

 

                                                                         

                                                                            Clouds:

                                                 cluttered, bruised with shamefull sorrow,

                                      welling up the days misfortune only to drain its tears.

 

 

                                                                             Rain:

                                            seeping into every well the earth has provided,

                                             overflowing to distract and make unpleasant.

                                                            

 

                                                                                I:

                                                                 sit in amazement,

                                                              adoring natures fury,

                                                realizing she cups us in her gentle hands,

                                                       controls the agenda of our lives.

           

 

                                                                          Nature:

                                                           Baptize me in your tears,

                                                    let me dance in the water so rare,

                                                let it be proven that I love your ways,

                                                             recognize your pain,

                                       and adore proving your place to all in this world.

Author notes

I find nature effects our lives emotionally, and physically every day. I like to be descriptive while proving this in my poem.

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  • HeavenScent4U
    October 4, 2007

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    wow this is awesome, very creative and wonderful metaphors. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed


  • Blueisacolour
    September 30, 2007

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    Hmmm, I love the way you've carefully avoided the stereotyped view of nature, and that's quite refreshing.
    =)
    Thanks for entering!


  • FifthDove
    September 16, 2007

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    Thanks for the entry and Welcome to AllPoetry

    I certainly agree with these words you have penned. A very relatable piece for me, nice work! Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest.
    Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    September 15, 2007

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    Welcome to All Poetry !

    This is certainly rich in imagery and most vivid. However I did struggle to find the connection with the school year, unless there are metaphors here that I haven't connected with.
    Thanks so much for your entry in our contest
    Gaylene