Your arms around me,
Holding me tight,
Securing my wishes,
Making everything right,
Holding your hand,
Our fingers laced,
Or kissing your lips,
In a lover's embrace,
Your smiling mouth,
Your shining eyes,
Truly so different,
From other guys.
My head on your chest,
Your beating heart,
I knew you were mine
From the very start.
Your playful laugh,
Your silly dance,
Incredibly lucky
To have the chance,
To know such a love
As true as this,
A love so divine,
So full of bliss.
These moments I miss,
For each, I yearn,
To love from a distance
We must learn.
Forever you'll be mine,
Like the blazing sun.
No matter the miles,
You're still the one.
Author notes
this is for my jear bear. im all the way in MA attending college. its only a state away, but neither of us have transportation. i miss him so much!!
my user name is italiangurrl
idrk what kinda love you would call this...i just miss my bf!!! lol
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I can relate
Wow.
That was totally magnificent and you got no idea how much i can relate to this! You did an amazing word in conveying different emotions from love, to the pain that being apart brings! From your words i can sense this yearning to be with the one that you love and your poem also holds strength and hope to it! I would say that this beautiful write would be a soothing balm for all those couples who have to be away from each other!
Poignant, intense and a real depth of emotion in your words!
Good luck and keep on penning!
Love,
Neera~
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Thank you so much for sharing this! Loved it before and I still do!
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Very loving and gentle piece this is, hon
I know what it's like to love across the miles
All the best to you! -
You did an absolutely beautiful job with this poem. It is truly amazing. God bless you in everything you do and write. Good luck to you and this beautiful piece of art in this contest.
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hahah i had made snickerdoodles that day... this one is so adorable... thank you so much and i wish you the best of luck!
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Very...
fast! it ran away with me! I think you showed him what he probably already knows! Really good. WASP.
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AWE! usually I hate these lovey poems but I really liked this.
(i only hate them because I am everso bitter after the douches i've dated)
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i was about to write a poem about the exact same thing... strange. anyways, yours turned out nicely.
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This is all happy and sugary and sweet enough to give me cavities
Very well written
Yet oddly, it reminded me of times that make me very depressed.
Ah well, cute write x3
Your description in the Shameless didn't do it justice
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Sweet
This is a sweet poem, it has a nice rhthym, and speaks directly from the heart. Well done-I am sure he misses you too, and it won't be forever.
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it is cute, and a lotta people wish for a feeling like that. good poem, keep writing.
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I love this poem, kinda makes me think of my guy. Have a nice day.
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this is SUCH a cute poem!! i really love the rhyme.
Your smiling mouth,
Your shining eyes,
Truly so different,
From other guys.
great write!!
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aaww i know how you feel! Long-distance love is not that easy- and you wondefully penned that acute feeling of seperation and loss, the yearning to be together and that feeling of our love will survive no matter what!!
i think that was one fantastic poem, good luck with your writing and hope you guys get to meet soon!
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Aww.. So cute
I though this poem had a great flow and rhythm to it.
Awesome. This is my favorite type of poetry. Not so much into free verse.
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This is really sweet
He must have loved it. I like the rhyme, and you never broke rhythm. A nice little poem! -
this is soooooo cuuute !!! simple nd honest!! sounds trully str8 from the heart!!!
goodluck wid ur jear bear hun !! hope things will get easier for yous!!
me
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this is soooooo cuuute !!! simple nd honest!! sounds trully str8 from the heart!!!
goodluck wid ur jear bear hun !! hope things will get easier for yous!!
me
xxx
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