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Would you be mine?

Would you be mine
if I hopped like a frog
would you be mine
if I oinked like a hog
would you be mine
if I sat like a dog
would you be mine
if I fell off a log

I would be yours
if you just held my hand
I would be yours
if you called me your man
I would be yours
if you were my biggest fan
I would be yours
if by my side you stand

would you be mine

 

 

 

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  • eleno
    March 7, 2008
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    hihi, i love this!! its hilarious -eleno


  • Layne
    December 17, 2007

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    This was just what I needed to read right now, this was hysterical, I love poetry with some humor, congrats on the gold, too funny!


  • transit
    September 23, 2007
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    oh!

    this is brilliant! the first stanza was so cute yet thought-provoking as it was rhyming. very interesting animals there.

    the second stanza is simple yet true. I think everyone wants just that in life eventually. you deserved the gold.



    cristiano99


  • Dragonia
    September 17, 2007

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    That is very cute. I guess you made her laugh then if you won the trophy. Well then there is not much to say that isn't already said.
    ~Dragonia~


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    I'm surprised again...

    I really like this. I think the first stanza is somewhat silly (but isn't that the point?!?) and again you have rhyme - but it works! Not all poetry should be serious and life shouldn't either. I love it!
    I like your outlook. Broken but hopeful.
    You did make me smile and laugh with this. If a guy wrote this to me, I'd definitely at least consider.

  • Aurora Ceres
    September 11, 2007

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    Awww Very cute.  The first bit is funny, whimsical and the last bit, very endearing. Nicely done...a well deserved trophy for this.

    Bella


  • XxpooranatevkaxX
    September 10, 2007

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    Just to add on to what I said before, Just remember, if I call you a loser, just know that your my loser.


  • XxpooranatevkaxX
    September 10, 2007
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    Love this. I would be yours. Even if I laughed at you and called you names. I would be yours. Great write.


  • WarmHeartedGeisha
    September 7, 2007

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    haha, this is sooooo cute. Really funny, really sweet, just all around a great write! O &congrats on the gold!

    ~Lorissa~


  • TwilightDazzles
    September 7, 2007

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    This is very cute!

    "Would you be mine if I fell off a log" This made me laugh! Not many poems can do that for me lol.


  • lovesawar08
    September 7, 2007
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    awww!

    that is so sweet. you really put alot of sadness into it. so sweet......well written poem!


  • LiciDoveyness
    September 7, 2007
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    That a sweet poem.

    I hope that who ever the girl that ends up being yours is a wonderful one. ^^


  • zhaniswolf
    September 6, 2007

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    aww this poem is so sweet. i love it. nice to know not all guys are all about sex. some actually have a heart. great poem. keep it up.


  • LadyLeviathan silver member
    September 6, 2007

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    awww my sweet angel! I WILL BE YOURS!

    be mine forever to hold...
    so we can share memories
    current or old

    Give me the strength
    to carry on and live
    Be mine, my angel
    For love I shall Give

  • ninaxxx
    September 6, 2007
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    Can i be yours?? xx


  • VirginiaDarling
    September 6, 2007
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    AWW

    So sweet, I liked it, thank you for entering, and good luck.

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