Whispered moans of lovers drifting,
Enraptured spirits lifting;
With incense whirling taking flight~
Far off cries of peacock courting,
Frenzied shows of passionate cavorting;
It seems romance is in the air tonight.
A zephyr breeze gently tickles the skin,
Raising excitement from within,
Ecstasy is prolonged even further.
Rhythmic undulations slowly increased,
What if this moment never ceased,
Would we die in ecstatic fervor?
A contest entry
- RUMI by Sonja.
800 points, ended September 20, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me go "ooh!!"...(Adults Only)-Prewrites Welcome! by Daizy21.
450 points, ended October 13, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - . by Aurora Ceres.
700 points, ended November 1, 2007, 75 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Everything Erotica! by Lost-Rose-Petal.
360 points, ended November 22, 2007, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Great poem GI wish you the best of luck in the contest and congratulations on the previously won honorable mention Great use of words in this poem.
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This is a very interisting write,thank you for entering and good luck!
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Erotic Rumi ... well yes he managed to do that quite well at times. Sensual words and images were part of his repertoire. Well done on exploring this aspect of his work. I liked the way this piece flowed and how you never overstepped the boundaries between sensual and crude. Lovely.
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Very good write. Nice rhyme and flow to it.
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I had to read i several time. It captures my intention with your rhyme pattern. I am not familiar with many poetical forms and this looks like one of them, or it was written with no any structure purpose. Poem nice painted with words.
~Sonja~
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Very enjoyable rhyme!
Here's to your fervor!
Wonderful entry - Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
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great write
also always wonder how great it must be to croak while having a major orgams. "dirty minds think alike"?
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Better to die in the way of paradise than never to have loved in anyway...lol, Nciely done! You have such a way with your words. ~Sie
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