yellow wildflowers grow
along the rocky coastline
merry suncatchers
broken wings displayed
in a living exhibit
injured wild kestrel
warm sand on the beach
summer bliss to feet as grit
natural exfoliant
A contest entry
- MORE HAIKU ANYONE? by Swan song.
800 points, ended September 8, 2007, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very good I enjoyed the first hiaku the most I will read again
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Good mix of haiku observations with a well chosen title. The merry suncatchers made me smile.
The sandy beach, what a great topic! Well done!
Dennis
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suncatchers...
Great stuff! Some very clever word choices in there!
Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for your wonderful comment about my haiku. This is my favorite form of poetry.
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very nice! The title is excellent for the three verses. Love the "merry suncatchers". Great observation in "natural exfoliant".
The first and last verses 'feel' warm, and the middle one, more chilly (maybe just remembering the cold, echoing hospital-like rooms). Enjoyed the write.
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Thank you for the appreciated comment about my haiku--this is my favorite form of poetry. Good to hear from you!
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Wonderful
Very well done. A great haiku chain. Best of luck in the contest.
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"yellow wildflowers grow
along the rocky coastline
merry suncatchers"
Beautiful imagery!
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Even though the contest asks for three different poems--and you've done that well--there is still a strong sense, implied in the title, that they fit into a larger pattern. Very nicely handled.
One could almost trace a metaphorical progression in the three: carefree beauty in the first; injured beauty in the second; and restoration of beauty in the third.
You handle the short, precise forms well.
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