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Broken

I watched the sun drown itself in the black hills, and I sat through the long darkness that threatened to rip apart my resolve. Now the sky turns milky gray as the sun prepares to resurrect itself and begin the day. I watched through the despair to see the demons go... to feel the light dissolve the shadow, but the shadow stayed, torturing my desperate eylids, embedding their gray in the depths of my pupils. Sleep would end my nightmare, only in blackness can the dark settle back in to the mist... but I have seen it through the night and now it will not leave... maybe never leave? I am soaked in tears and blood, sodden in darkness and the light can no longer burn it away. From the 8th floor golden tendrils crack the heavens.... but refuse to melt the death from my eyes.

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  • JBudRos
    August 15, 2008

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    my I will guide you please take my hand as we do walk through this valley that is covered by the shadow of death...let me fear the evil let me be the one you lean on in your times of need!

  • Give-in-toHeartsFire
    November 28, 2007

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    Cold shoulders, they need that red sweater
    Swaying to and fro feeling like your heavier
    Just lay down and breath alittle slower
    Take your knees and bring them in closer

    Now cry through all this pain
    Such a good soul its just alittle
    alittle searing
    alittle buring inside your heart

    Ok now that your staring into you soul
    breath that last little breath
    And give in to it all

  • wiccanway
    September 24, 2007
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    while the intent is obviously not, the wording is beautiful. my favorite line is "Now the sky turns milky gray as the sun prepares to resurrect itself and begin the day." while i hope you are in a better place emotionally this is a very good piece. thank you for sharing with us.


  • zt
    September 23, 2007
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    Still awake
    on the 8th floor
    I watch the sunrise
    and think about moving
    to an apartment on
    the other side of the building
    because I'm not a morning person...

    I hope you've gotten some rest since this. I like your way with words, but am sorry for the place you are that creates such works as this...

  • luvdrkchocolate
    September 8, 2007

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    Oh. This is a very sad poem that you have going on here. I don't remember you writing such sad poems before but it has been a long time since I've seen you post something so maybe things have really changed for you. It was pretty expressive and flowed easily for me so I think that you did a good job of expressing yourself. I hope that you feel better after writing this.

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