The only thing viewable
is the sadness in their
eyes, protruding as pain
finds exit only through there.
Affixed against the flesh,
invisible scars of bodies that
ache, but no one seems to care.
The young, the lost the scared
the future is what they hope for.
Adults, vanquish with despair
for life fleets in a vacuum.
Let our hearts open to them,
the children call out our names.
"See us we are here"...the
only thing they wish to say.
A contest entry
- Invisible... by elemental angel.
450 points, ended September 10, 2007, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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From the quiet understatement of the title, so powerful a write may have been unexpected. A heart-breaking read. Such true and original images. The embodiment of their cautious longing.
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AND WE DO SEE
through your eyes and with your words we are reminded
of the people that suffer in Poverty 75% of which are children.
A truly compassionate write
bravo Lady L.
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So moving, so beautiful. it's hard not to feel for those children and unfortuneatly many of the charities that claim to help are only fleecing people of their money. i loved the flow of this piece, it slid right through my mind at a steady pace.
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This is such a powerful message.
"See us we are here"...the
only thing they wish to say.
^^ That part stands out to me for some reason. This is a wonderful poem and hopefully it opens peoples eyes.
Amazing poem!
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Children are the future. Their past--their present is, too often, their pain...
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This is a powerful write -- all the more so because of your understatement. While the emotional inclination may be to shout, to rage, to curse -- the quite voice whispering of despair makes this a moving and poignant
write. Excellent.
CaliOkie
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this write breaks my heart how invisible are these children in the eyes of the world, how deaf are we to their screams. SEE US WE ARE HERE!!! should be plastered all over the world. EXCELLENT MY PISCES FRIEND GOD BLESS
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OMG! I just entered a contest with the same title as your poem. It is truly haunting what is happening in the world. and to the children. I am outraged! I am going to make these children seen. Some may become bored with my musing for the next few days but I am on a quest top use my writing abilities to bring some of these young faces to the forefront. I thank you my sister for doing the same. It does seem that "no one seems to care"
Where is the media to highlight these atrocities? I have no monies to spare can barely take care of my bills but my time can be spent to send messages to those here at AP and other sites I frequent.
"Let our hearts open to them,
the children call out our names.
"See us we are here"...the
only thing they wish to say."
A resounding YES!
Thank you for these words. They are confirmation that my mission is on the right path.
Congratulations on earning the Gold Cup with this well deserved tribute to those who cannot speak for themselves.
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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Congratulations on the trophy placement for this poem that speaks for those without a voice. The premise of the poem,to look into the pleading,pain filled eyes that ask only to be seen is admirable, we all need to see what is unpleasant to see,children are dying to live.Well done.
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congratulations on the gold..... oh how procative....their call...
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This is such a heart wrenching piece. Truly, ones who are treated as invisible, like so many. How is it the eyes can be so selective when they have so much to view? Glad to see a gold trophy here. Very nicely done. ~Pamela
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Wonderful take on the prompt, crazy to think that africa produces enough food to feed the entire planet yet her children face such hardship. Thank you so much for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck.
Bravo
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The saddest thing of this is; there is enough wealth, nutrition, and love in the world where these torn eyes should never be invisible. I feel helpless when I see the devastation and pain. There is nothing I can do but pray and morn. Your words pierce the heart. A perfect interpretation of the prompt. I wish you the best in the contest.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Renee, this is something very close to my heart...Like yourself i often feel helpless with this worldwide situation...I too pray and contribute as much as I can.
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a truly poignant and saddening
piece... very thought provoking... it gives one a lot to ponder...
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-tears-
So sad how we turn away,
the human race, the human race
If we had tears, clouds of gray
no water, no whispers, nor place
It seems to me that deaths reward,
should be for those that embrace
Such a cold hearted world,
That leaves a bitter taste...
You capture their words of empty pleas poetically.
Thanks for being a true voice in troubled times.
Peace, Timothy xo
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heart breaking photo. and poem. well done. well said. good luck in the contest.
blu
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it's a crazy world, we have so much money as first world countries, to throw away on war and death yet not enough to feed people that need it! a good sad poem.
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thank you for the comment Ian...Smile. oh I made the correction, thanks again.
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This is a poignant poem touching on a very needful subject indeed. This one stings the conscience and makes me realize how good we have it here in America.
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This is almost emotionally draining. The forgotten children that we only see during a late night commercial break. Great vision in writing this but hurtful reality that still exist. The picture punctuates the message more. ~ Mikey
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My-key it is draining...I donate as much as I can for the cause, but it just a drop in the bucket...More has to be done.
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Thank you so much for writing this. This is a subject that tears at my heart and more people need to have this problem put in front of them. We can't, mustn’t ignore the children. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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