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The brunette in white chiffon (poem/short story)

He walks down an abandoned alley, has no idea why he continues this eerie walk while being enveloped by broken bottles and the stench of old fruit. Flood lights remain prominent yet dim enough to keep his pupils dilated. The road for him is never ending, his feet lead the way yet his mind is distant. He stares at his feet and counts the steps. He notices the miles of graffiti and follows his fingers along the shameful words displayed as if he felt all that hatred for what the world has come to. After hundreds of cobblestone steps, he sees newly paved concrete

leading to a doorway waiting to be finished. He climbs the steps inside that seem to never have been walked upon before. He reaches the only room in the 40 story building with a ridiculous laugh and a shameful nod ...until he entered.

                                                   

Illuminated white room, draping chiffon that whispers past his lips to display the rarity so hard to find ...a girl in a white gown.

 

She stares with complete confidence. The bold peridot of her eyes; the only vivid color the room possesses. She doesn't look real, she doesn't even look possible. He doesn't want to ravish this beauty, He wants to caress the long, soft, angelic locks that seep in every ounce of light,

acting as if it is urning to be touched. He wants to brush the backing of his hand against her cheek

while she closes her eyes.. only to wait for those bold eyes to find his. He daydreams this, yet appears completely still. She doesn't say a word, yet plays the white piano the room has provided.

The music; minor chords filled with such sorrow and loneliness becomes her personality for him..

lets him get to know her without words.. no need for them.                                                       

She finishes, he opens his eyes to find her standing considerably shorter than he expected.

She slowly approaches, seems cautious and scared. That made her look more fragile and innocent than ever to him ...it was beautiful.

 

He stares into her eyes so far below him ..fearing to touch her, knowing she is so pure and natural. Her fingers weave through his hair, relaxing his every worry and kisses him with her blushing lips.

She notices his brown eyes adjusting to the light, forgetting the awful ruins those beautiful eyes have layed upon. She was his cure, his future, the place his feet led him to.

Author notes

~Aura of Night~
{B}- Signoff
Option 3- Bella Babie
'I find this poem I have made to be very pure, displaying the word 'love' and not 'lust'.'

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  • Liquid memories
    November 19, 2007
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    lovely story of the night visit. success to you in the contest.


  • Myjoy gold member
    November 15, 2007

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    Beautiful. Really really pretty. I loved the style the flow the visuals. Well done, Good luck and thank you for sharing.

  • gochristyromano
    November 5, 2007
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    this was absolutely beautiful, well written, I love it. The only problem is in this contest I was looking specifically for poetry, and this is a bit short-storyish for the criteria. But as a piece, I thought it was amazing. Good luck in the contest.


  • Emm Jayy
    September 25, 2007

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    The words are beautiful... It's a simple-type story that has an underlying feeling of complexity.

    Great job and good luck in the contest!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    Truly Beautiful

    I loved this. It is very original and unique. I have not seen a write quite like this one. The imagery you used was gorgeous. The flow of this poem/short story was wonderful, and so very filled with emotions of clinging on to a love that perhaps was there in the past, but is no longer there. It's like the man in this poem was holding on to a hope, a fantasy of this beauty dressed in white, that kept his faith about love in tact, alive. This was so gracefully expressed. Thanks for sharing, & best of luck in my contest


  • Plastic Dreams
    September 19, 2007

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    bravo.

    I'm not exactly sure on how to review this write.

    I will say the images of her make me fall in love with the thought of never worrying and keeping company forever without the world.

    bliss to be exact.

    i took my time to read through this, a second time even and it's a very good idea to write about. inside the dismal of this world comes a precious thought of keeping love forever.

    much enjoyed with thought and much enjoyed with love.

    thank you.

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