Two promises made
One by her
The other by him
One to stop
Another to help
Her promise
To never do it again
To never let the lines of red
Appear
Upon her skin
His promise
To make sure hers is kept
He’ll do it himself
Gouge
Out his chest
A Promise broken
Tears fall to the
Floor
She cant see him hurt
An internal fight
Its so hard for him
A promise never
Broken
This is the first
Two promise were made
Both broken
Her scars will fade
His were never there
Thank god
Author notes
Nothing special, just came to me
A contest entry
- Anything You Want :: Celebrating my 100 Trophies by Manda Kathryn.
900 points, ended February 13, 2008, 45 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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G'Day xNightxOfxAgonyx
Excellent. I love the depth in the words; the fact that this just "came to me" tells me you are a hell of a poet
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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LANEY!
Why won't you TALK to me!! -
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A) Chillaxe theres nothing to talk about, like i said it was just a poem, If its got anything to do with how i feel i would put 'personal' in the tags so just chill kay?
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Oh..... I am sad now... And glad for the other.....
I like this poem. Because you can sense the author's regret and sadness, yet you can also detect a sort of relief that not both were harmed.... really makes for a good poem..... I definitely like it lots.... no spelling errors, flows well, all around? Great job on this one, Shaney.
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Im glad you got the emotions i was trying to put forth, actually you nailed them exsactly (even the ones i wasnt sure of lol) Thank you for the comment!!
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and if it were true... goodnesss i'd hope someone could talk to someone about it. anywayz, good write
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Just a write, nothing to talk about
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