Sitting here thinking what the hell I'm going to do
What the heck is wrong, why'd I have to like you
She has some thing I guess that I lack
I can tell by the way that you act
Why do you always confuse me
What is it you want to see?
Soon I won't be able just to cry
My heart inside is going to die
You say you don't like me but you act the other way
Should I believe the way you act or what you say
Do you do that to everyone or what's the deal?
Cause you're giving me pain that I just can't heal
They say time helps but it's way too slow
I can't believe I've been driven this low
I wish I could relive our first dance
It was the only time you gave me a chance
I would have been everything you needed and more
And because of that my heart feels so sore
I know what you want and know what you got
And the difference between me and her is a lot.
Author notes
Uum..yeah. It's sort of written how I talk with hecka and cause. Besides that I think it's pretty normal enough. For a person who can't be with the person they hold dearest to them anyway. Just basically about my really good friend I'm known for 3 years who I've liked and he knows I like him..who just recently started going out with this girl he's known for ummm 3 weeks. Yeah
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Yeah just a little emotion oozed out in this one, lol. I think it works really well and explains your emotions nicely.
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she needs to go fall off a clif!!!! she doesn't even like him like...i knew her for a semester and she had 4 boyfriends in 5 1/2 months!!!! see she's just boy crazy!!!!
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great job... i think a lot of people can relate to this poem... its about wanting what that other person has... but not really know what that is... you just want it.. no matter what it is... good luck with your search... and if that guy doenst know what is right in front of him... thats his loss... maybe one day he will wake up one day and see you... good luck with that and best if luck in the contest...
-tk -
Very good write, a love the emotion expressed in this.
-Silvos.
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oh just wonderful!!! i really loved this line::
"Soon I won't be able just to cry
My heart inside is going to die"
--awesome!!!
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GREAT WRITE! thanks for entering and good luck. And remember good things come to those who wait! that is all I can say about this. i was there too, but for not as long, and we kept trying it and we never officially dated, and now I realized he wasnt the one for me. So good things come to those who wait. Dont worry so much. and great job again.
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good write
I really like this. It has a couple of grammatical errors but hey, we ALL have those so no biggy, Your flow is great and you really put the feeling out there. Thats what makes a poem rememberable is the feeling you get when you read it. I really like these lines
I wish I could relive our first dance
It was the only time you gave me a chance
You can almost imagine the dance.
I love it. Also good choice of words to. very creative and i can feel the pain behind it. -
Touching..
Completely love it, it shows the depth of the emotion you feel for that person and in great detail.
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