Hiding behind stained-glass windows I watch you
But you'll never know
My feelings haven't gone away
They're hidden deep inside
Like a monster trying to get out
But I've shut it down
Given up
I don't want you back
I'm content hiding behind stained-glass windows
A contest entry
- Gasps! It's an options contest! by chugglepuff.
700 points, ended September 9, 2007, 18 entries
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Comments
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Short and too the point, you get a lot across in those few words.
I think "There hidden" should be "They're hidden" and "havn't" should be "haven't". You didn't put your option in your author's notes, but it was obvious which option you chose so I don't mind. It might be worth double-checking the rules in future, though.
I like the speaker's understanding of their own feelings and how they know what they're doing probably isn't wise, but they choose to do it anyway.
Thank you for your entry and keep up the good work!
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I like this one, quite a bit. Your writing ability seems far beyond your years. I know exactly where you're coming from.
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