your fingers unbutton my body
(let loose my deepest sighs)
in the gesture of hips
I sway,
sway to the single song
of your hands
my body with your body
is a guitar's rhythm;
strumming a lifetime
locked in our breasts
from your lips
I fall,
fall as a vocal
penetrating the beat
there is nothing, no one,
like the strong harmonic pleasure
of your pulse
Author notes
Graphic borrowed from Celticmoon
A contest entry
- Sweet Sounds by Celticmoon.
550 points, ended September 29, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You captured me from the first line. Some beautiful work. Yours is the first ive come upon and been thouroughly impressed!
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u dance divinely...mind if i dip ya
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Sensual, sultry, sexy and steaming!
I can see nothing wrong with your muse as you have penned something incredibly seductive to the mind. The imagery is nothing short of amazing! Can you tell I loved this piece?
Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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Thank you so much. I just returned from a weekend away with the one who inspires me...and inspired this What a nice surprise to see that I placed in this wonderful contest. Thank you so much!
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Just stopping in to catch a breath of fresh air and savor some lines of beauty.
There is no denying that your words carry a "harmonic pulse" all of their own and I am always left feeling sated after reading you.
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Thanks Kim!
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Your at your best unbuttoned hon..lol..
this is so sensual, so loving. The sweetest sounds..
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Thanks Kathleen. Where you been?
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I like it, its short and powerful. Vivid images i get from reading this. I love the way you set the stage with the first two lines. You did a really nice job, Well Done!
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Certainly some sweet sounds pulsing this this poem. Greaet flow and vivid visual images throughout these lines - simplistic in it's write, brief in the words - nothing more is needed, all is here.
. Rewarded 4
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I can say nothing that hasn't been said before - a wonderfully understated and, therefore, powerful piece of eroticism. Don't stop - keep on being unbuttoned.
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EGADS
You wrote this with the souls of your heart. Words are never words with you. I hope you live longer than me, so I will always have your poems in front of me to help pattern my aspirations. I also hope you don't have to pass away before you are blessed with people knowing your name in the poetic community at large.
P.S. Featured.
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Thank you so much Timothy. You are too sweet and thanks so much for the feature too.
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Wow. This is a pretty cool poem of yours. I don't think I remember reading this one before. I'm glad I got a chance to read it though. When I was reading it, it reminded me of a song. I don't know why but I guess I kind of heard the words in a rhythm like a tune. Maybe it was because of the picture that you have up. You did a good job of expressing yourself on this one!
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very sensual...
Erotica is my favorite. I love the inner stirrings that a well crafted erotic poem creates. I think this, is such a poem. Great feeling and imagery.
. Rewarded 4
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Interesting .
My first impression is that this is very sensuous. Emotionally I can feel the erotisim in this. This is not hard to read so is not awkward and needs no changeing. The title is just what this calls for and the first line sets the tone very well. The last line sums this up fine. My favorite part is the second verse. There was nothing that I didn't like. It was a good write overall. -
I feel the pulse here. It is sweet, and strong, pounding away in the guise of memory. Lovely work poet.
For some reason I've missed your muse. I'm not sure if it's because you were absent from the site or I've been giving your poetry an oversight. If it is the latter, my apologies. I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Softly erotic...gently sensual and full of that special " something " that aways comes with your poetry.
Beautiful write Snoopy
Roses at your feet
Raker
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Nice,
Wow, I'm impressed, such a beautiful, passionate read you have weaved together my friend. Always a pleasure to read your works of art from your poetic heart.
Keep up the wonderful works, and I wish you well in the contest! Peace, your friend, Timothy
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Thanks Timothy. Good to see you
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You had my attention from the first line because I have a very special memory about buttons too,lol! I still need to write that "button" poem, especially now that I've read this amazing poem of yours. I loved the movement and the pulse here...the rhythms of love in perfect harmony...poetry in motion as I always say. This is beautiful, my friend..soft and sensual!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you Miss Nic. It is good to see your smiling face around here again.
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beautifully expressed... I've often
thought of the rhythm of lovers as musical and you gave life, quite articulately and eloquently, to that theory... wonderful!
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this is a nice one lyrical, pulse has always been one of my fav words .. u write of a very sultry embrace and your words too radiate a beautiful rythmn here
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What an excellent opening scene you have imbued for this lovely, sensual read I loved it, no, adored it from top to bottom
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"your fingers unbutton my body
(let loose my deepest sighs)"
This is so beautiful, so sensual, every line of this poem is an experience, love this!
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That's my favorite kind of music. The kind played on heart strings and taut skins. Good luck in the contest. I love the movement and the message of this piece.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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beautiful!
Once again, your pen has sung a timeless song. I love your line; "I fall from your lips,
a vocal
penetrating the beat"
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many more kisses where that one came from
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"in the gesture of hips
I sway,
sway to the single song
of your hands"
Sighhh...Damn, Woman. Just damn. 
Good luck in Bel's contest, my Friend. Wanda
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Thanks Wanda
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