When I fall asleep I find myself in a different world
A world beyond ours where no harm can come to you
Where strange things happen with in what seems to be hours
but is merely the blink of an eye
I may find myself lost in a troubling maze of color
Or deep under the sea
I may be in my worst case scenario
Or in a place with a loved one
But this will only happen
When I fall asleep
Author notes
this was a poem i composed from my dreams
i picked #6 write about dreams for the contest
A contest entry
- 100 entries... by Dancing the Rumba.
600 points, ended December 20, 2007, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Third contest.. options options and options by PonyPride.
625 points, ended January 10, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"Dreamy"
Lol, this was a very good poem about dreams. It was a very deep take and I liked it however I did ask for a dream from yesterday I think. Regaurdless, it was great and very close to what I asked you for since our dreams our repeptive. Anyway, thank you. -
This is awesome! A poem with imagery, feeling and who knows what! Dreams are always wonderful to take poems from.
Good lick!
Vivi -
truly our dreams contain worlds of wonder!! i love dreaming!! great poem
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Wonderful!
Really passionate! Love how you describe dreaming! Absolutely, 100% magnifico!
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I really like this .Dreams are very powerful.Thank you for sharing this nice piece you are a very good writer.Best Wishes
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Wow this is amazing, see i think this is completely well written, and very enjoyable to read!
I love it, especially how you say it only happenes when you fall asleep, o'so true, and well this is an amazing job, nothing to critique!!!!!
stephanie
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dreaming is a very powerful thing. it is foreshadowing of what is yet to come. when you dream its just giving you small glimpses of what you wish for or desire. great write you have here. keep pennin' dont doubt yourself. just express yourself. there is no right way or wrong. just a difference in opinion ok sweetie!
LadyLeviathan.
Or Jasmine
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