You still refused,
You used the words,
This consequently wasn’t deadly.
You only stole the part of me that mattered.
It bothers me,
The smile that you feel brewing,
While sliding sickly sugar blades
Straight through the walls of scarcely vital organs.
Say yes to screaming
While dramatists are fighting
Disemboweling split attentions
‘till the centre coats the bitter disregard.
Let me assist you,
If you want it, do the research,
Just make sure you slice it in the right direction,
I told you the attention gets you
Nowhere.
Author notes
Ok, these comments are pretty crucial to understand this poem. This poem is written from myself, to myself. It is about my battling with Histrionic Personality (Attention Seeking) Disorder. SO basically, the "I" is Me and the "You" is me. Sorry if that is confusing. The word I used by the way, as inspiration for this was "Evisceration "
A contest entry
- My Very Own Rounds Contest - Part Two by Exodus.
1200 points, ended September 20, 2007, 17 entries
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This was a great use of the prompt. I loved it! The explanation helps, it was lovely before I read it, but with that extra bit, it takes it to a whole new level. Thank you
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Oh...wow..this is such an interesting poem! It really forces the reader to read between the lines. Your author's notes definitely cleared it up. Absolutely fascinating topic!
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Interesting and creative. Is the spelling of suger on purpose? Just a thought stuck in my mind.
Thanks so much for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest.
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My favorite part of this write was
the second stanza.
I liked how you set this up.
The wording, as you said.
"the "I" is Me and the "You" is me"
I rather enjoy these sort of writes.
Thanks for sharing
-Jess
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