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The wasteland part one

A desolate wasteland lie before me
                    The path is so unclear.
I see no trees, no grass, no life behold
                    And silence is what I hear.
My footsteps keep company for they
                    Reply to my relentless sighs,
This limbo is irony to my inner stutterings
                    Before utterings the word dies...
F
  A
    L
        L
          I
            N
                G
Down to ground
                      Z
                        E
                          R
                              O
My journey has no limit and
              I
Cannot end it until I fall to floor and
            Die
This desperation has tired me to exhaustion
            But I keep on
                                W
                                  A
                                      L
                                        K
                                            I
                                                N
                                                    G
I keep on
              W
                  A
                    L
                        K
                          I
                            N
                                G

Crooked lines of whispering winds
                        Show wrinkles of time past,
Father time sleeps in hibernation
                    And rears nothing in lands vast.
Mood poisoning's got me facing the camera
                                  With the world a blur behind,
A puzzle of scattered shards reflect me
                            A face thats grown unkind...

Author notes

Not my usual poetry style but I've got an idea for a trilogy poem watch this space

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  • pimp daddy satin
    September 23, 2007
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  • WickdlyUndrstanding
    September 15, 2007

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    interesting layout
    and the first stanza was my favorite.
    the rest of it.. lots of descriptions, little feeling, literally, so i'm looking forward to reading the following two.
    =]

    ~WU


  • Bitter Kold
    September 5, 2007
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    It kind of makes me wonder what the next two will hold. This is a great setup to possible gold.