Look closely at the early morning dew.
As day awakes it magically appears.
How perfectly it’s formed as if on cue,
to light our dawn with dew drop chandeliers.
They last for only moments, then they’re gone.
As sunbeams pause to gaze in wonderment,
in reverence then, they plant their kiss upon
a simple beam of light, though heaven sent.
How can such gentle dew drops then compare
with angry rains that lash in winter's storm?
The elements for each the same are there,
and yet results are opposites in form.
But when at last, the sky of winter clears,
how sweet to see the dew drop chandeliers.
Author notes
Photo 'Dew Drop Chandeliers' by Simon: http://www.beakerst.shutterchance.com/photoblog/3310.htm
Contest: Water
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A contest entry
- Sonnets, sonnets, and more sonnets by RatherImaginative.
1925 points, ended September 8, 2007, 40 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A contest for sonnets and villanelles only. by ecrivain01.
425 points, ended October 7, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DEW by Melodies.
550 points, ended September 18, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Second Chance Contest for Sonnets and Villanelles, original entrrants only by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended October 8, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Elements by BeautifullyBroken42.
425 points, ended February 16, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Nature Poems Contest by Abnormal.
400 points, ended June 28, 53 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Earth Fire Water Air by Shelby K.
900 points, ended July 6, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A wonderful poem...oh to write like this....superb
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Beautiful fellow conestant! Simply beautiful!
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very nice poem. thanks for entering and good luck.
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Gorgeous write. It took my breath away! The rhyme is amazing, and the wording is great. I loved the descriptiveness. Thank for entering and best of luck!
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This is a beautiful piece, and I can see why it has won so many trophies. The phrase "Dew Drop Chandeliers" evokes a beautiful image, and the rest of the poem builds and develops that picture.
My only thought was in this line:
"Lasting for only moments, then they’re gone."
I wonder if instead of "lasting" you might want to consider "they last" which is unstressed/stressed as opposed to "lasting" which is stressed/unstressed. I think it might fit the flow a bit better. Just my opinion though and it's a beautiful write.
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Wow this was a wondrful sonnet. I like the picture and I like your imagery formed by your words. Congratulations on your trophies.
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Wow, this is so beautiful. I loved the imagery when you compared the small, innocent dewdrops to raging storms. Well Done!
Evinde
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Two thumbs up!
I love this piece. It had a beautiful flow along with great imagery.
"But when at last, the sky of winter clears,
how sweet to see the dew drop chandeliers."
The last two lines are absolutely perfect and bring this awesome sonnet to an amazing end. this was a great write, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Awesome job
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beautiful poe
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Exquisite
The title lured me in and the most excellent Iambic pentameter sang me down the page in harmonious imagery. Indeed a fine piece. Paggz
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This is beautiful and soft. I really like the last two lines of this poem. It sums everything up. Good Write.
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this to. It is well written and a great outlook on water. Great poem! maby the best I've seen and read. Get job!
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I *heart* this! I'm saving all my favs of yours. This takes my mind away as if I am laying there with vision of magnification watching a dew drop. Waiting for it to finally release it's hold from the vine and plunge to the earth to quench life. Wouldn't it be so splendid to write a poem from a dew drops point of view? Simply heavenly! -
I really like the phrase "dewdrop chandeliers." Now this reminds me of old poets and is very refreshing and from the looks of the trophies you've won, I'd say others agree.
Nicely rhymed and good description!
Congrats on being picked for the random poems.
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HOW ON EARTH DID I MISS 'THIS'
I don't believe this cuz...I just checked Feature colums on opening page and you are first poem in a featured section there...I read it without knowing it was yours and WOW girl you bit me all over again but somehow it sounded so smooth to my ears I knew I knew who it was...almost fell off me bleedin chair I did...This is Wonderful...LOVE IT!!!
Cuz
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This was totally wonderful. Congrats on your success with this poem. I really do love the imagery in this piece
Kari
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this is very good, I like the double use of the word chandeliers it ties up the ending very nicely, the rhyming is good and each line ties in with the one before and after flawlessly :]
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beautiful imagery and true to the sonnet form a love poem to nature 'in reverence they plant their kiss upon a simple beam of light' gives it such a spiritual quality
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good job, its been a long time that i have read a sonnet that well written, nice title, its different and i like it
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Usually when you run across a poem with a rhyme scheme, the words that rhyme with each other are usually simplistic. Your words here have depth. The couplet at the end is a beautiful way to sum up the previous part of your poem. I'm not one for rhyming poetry but I do indeed love your sonnet.
(Your diction is nothing less than brilliant.)
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This is such a beautiful write. It's sound on lips, and thoughts in mind, so carefully created with magic by you! Thank you. FransB
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excellent
I can see why this won gold. Merry Christmas.
Joe
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A lovely piece. Thank you for entering.
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Making me happy!
The wonderment of dew! Ah, nature has us under her spell!
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beautiful~
This is beautiful and you penned it just perfectly as well...like you said only here for a short time then the dew disappears..
Best of luck in the contest...
I just penned a new one too hope you come by and visit me as well
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Very lovely as well. I love them both! you have such a talent with words
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Beautiful, the metaphor is inspired and wonderfully expressed. The rhyme was flawless and it flowed excellently, this is so impressive. Best of luck with the contest!
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Nice poem.
You don't need the "for" in line five, and no comma after then in line 9 or the commas after elements and same in line eleven. All in all this is a good poem. I'm impressed. Thanks for entering.
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Flawless meter, and your imagery is amazing. The only technical glitch is the absence of the possessive apostrophe in "winters" (stanza 3, line 3). I love to see the sun upon the dew in the morning for how everything glistens so beautifully. It's what makes me love frost rather than snow, for frost later melts into these gems, while snow just melts. Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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Comparing dew drops to the pendants of chandeliers is a sweet image. There is an interesting contrast in the third quatrain, then you bring it back to peace and beauty. Perhaps too much punctuation, eg, the end of line 7. Best of luck!
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Very evocative – some autumnal mornings our orchard is festooned with spider webs bedecked with these crystals, as you say ephemeral moments yet very striking. The only slight nit I would make is that I would like a stronger closing couplet… but then that is just my taste for a punch line – perhaps I should try for less pugilistic as well…
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