She comes to me at night
I, in my bed, alone
Full of grace and laughter, she comes to me
She touches me gently with fingers of silk
Gazing into my eyes as pearls roll down her cheeks
Smiling, she touches me
She kisses me like she always did
Honey and cinnamon on her breath
Wonderful intoxication as she kisses me
She enfolds me in dewy velvet
Her gentle heat surrounding my strength
Easing my pain, she enfolds me
She drains me of all I have
Body moving above mine, hair trailing in my face
Our heartbeats synchronised as she drains me
She watches me as I sleep
Not moving, studying my every feature
Eyes misty, she watches me
She comes to me at night
In the morning I am alone once more
But still, she comes to me
Author notes
This is a challenge entry. (Only just managed to get online to post it )
Please tell me what you think
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This is very soft and beautiful.
It has a touch of sadness to it but still, I think this is wonderful. Good luck to you.
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Thanks for the comment. I was feeling a bit sad so it came through in this piece ...
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What a wonderful entry
i read Ktulu's instructions for this contest and i'm going to put myself out there at the risk of being punished, but i'm afraid i don't think this was erotic enough - You DO write erotic, but this one was very sensual ~biting nails~ sorry, but i am ALWAYS honest with You ...
i agree with Arzab - that's the feeling i got as well, but then again i agree with LadyOfAvalon too coz it was so sad
This is an excellent write Master - it was soft, subtle and filled with something that i'm not quite sure what it is ... but it was brilliant - well done, as always You show me through Your words how unique You really are,
Forever Yours,
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My darling pet, I expect you to be honest with Me at all times
I guess it is a matter of interpretation whether it is erotic or sensual. In My opinion erotic can be subtle too.
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Please don't get me wrong! i thought it was an amazing write, but it was sad and i don't like it when You're sad - oh no, not at all! - maybe that's why it didn't come across as erotic to me ~shrug~
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Beautiful write. Very sensual. I liked the ending. It made me think of even if a person doesn't come to someone physically, the thought of them can make them seem to be there in spirit. Good luck in the contest.
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I wrote this to be ambiguous on purpose, it can either be someone dreaming of his lost love, or someone who is actually visited by the ghost of his lost love. Or probably some other interpretation too
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wow, this is so beautiful and descriptive that it nearly brought tears to my eyes. just beautiful my friend and rather humbling if i must say
best of luck in the challenge. be well and be blessed
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I was feeling a bit down and had a picture of someone who had lost the love of his life and this came out of it.
Thanks for the comment.
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