That quiet repression
The queen of black houses laughs once more
Pinpricks of you
Bleeding through
What you are
What you were
Mingling together
Sweet cocktail of ambiguity
You are
You were
Her cold laughter fills you
And you are someone else.....again
Please tell me what you think
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this one made me think of a horror film.
i like it.
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Thank you.
Despair
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Well you would have to know I would enjoy this one. I need to come around more to read all you write.
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I like this, it leaves the reader open to make their own heads or tale of the write, leaves to the imagination without telling the whole story... grand job here
Karen
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Thank you. It was a very odd dream I had and something had to come of it.
Despair
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huh....
*ahem* yea -
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I would like to know what you didnt like about the piece. If you have time to tell me that would be great. Thanks.
Despair
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this is about an ex yes?
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Actually it is not about an ex. It is about hiding yourself, so far and so deep, you dont even know who you are anymore. It is about trying to find yourself again and then discovering that the person you were is no longer the person that you were. Thanks.
Despair
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dreams to me are always confusing, like trying to run away and only moving at walking pace, your words sound haunted, like someone locked in depresssion, nnot meaning you, just what i feel when reading your words, here, her cold laughter fills you, its like being taunted by someone once a friend now just another person on the list of hurts, hope you understand what i mean by these words. very passionate poem and so stark, love the way you write, you bring anything to life.
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Thanks. I am so glad that you liked it. I always appreciate when you take the time to read and comment.
Despair
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Feels cold, like addiction and one sided love.
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Thanks. It was wierd, I remember having this dream and everyone kept chanting to me "Queen of black houses" so I wrote this. Sometimes I have the wierdest dreams. I wont even tell you the one from last night, although you may be the only one that could appreciate it.
Despair
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I'm always interested in hearing strange dreams.
Tell away
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nice... very dark
and haunting feel to this... the flow is very lyrical and lends itself well to this darkness, also
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Thanks. I did mean it to be haunting so I am glad it came off that way. It is always dissapointing when a piece comes off an entirely different way.
Despair
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Great Work!
Solid,, short and to the point very well done. Nice to see you writing again.
Peace as always.
Blut Rot
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As always thank you. I am doing well. Just really busy.
Despair
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oh creepy! i can't believe i nearly missed this one too. "What you are
What you were
Mingling together" crazy how that happens. guess it is better than losing yourself completely though. i could do without the past me
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lol..
Thanks hun.
Despair
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Very nice and quite chilling. Marvelous work as always darlin.
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Thanks. Sorry I have been so behind on commenting and reading. I have been super busy!!
Despair
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that was awesome it sent chills down my spine.
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Thanks so much. I really appreciate it.
Despair
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