Looking for something
you'll never get
after being so succesful
you'll die, you'll rest
How can this be possible?
I have nothing to prove to myself
I'm just a shadow
I'm just a slave
"lyrics of pain"
sobbing quietly
crying in the rain
"Rain can hide tears"
my mind is covered with fog
Why can't I see clear?
I've drunk
from the goblet of sadness
I want to fall into
the burning ashes
and rest forever in darkness...
-Frozen Panic-
Nisha
Author notes
The first poem I wrote, I hope you like it...
What do you think of it?
Comments
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for be a first poem,is really deep,and your motto 'rain can hide tears' is awesome and true,keep on writing good poems
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WOW very intense.
My first impression is what an awsome poem from someone so young. Hope you continue to write. Emotionally I can feel these words they are so implicit they describe this poem and the idea of "Frozen Panic" so intensely that I feel like it was as if I was the one feeling these thoughts. There is absolutely nothing awkward in this and nothing should be changed. My favorite part is all of this there is nothing for me to dislike. The title is absolutely perfect. The first line sets this poemup extreamly well and the last line is the right one for this. I thought that this is first rate especially for the first poem. I really liked it.
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