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In after days

In after days,
my head is a-fade-away.
In yesterdays
sadness, what a price i pay.
you are gone,
oh mother dear.
Gone with lil warning,
yet mom i am still here.
Y?
I am not to be
sure of-
merely that i remain here
because of God and love
Time will
go by fast.
Soon now (in seconds really)
will become the new past.
But mom, i want u not
to be part of lost days
for you are still present and
alive in so many ways
Cancer had taken u,
there is nothing i can do.
Merely pray and wish
for God to be with me if you
cannot be
In after days,
my heart, it bleeds
for you are the only love
it ever needs.
But you are gone,
taken by Cancer-
no longer here to be with me
and I've decided
moving ahead (but looking behind)
is the answer.
In afterdays,
i remain with thoughts of you
in yesterdays
i'm glad i was always with you.

Author notes

as many of u kno (mostly becos i have lotsa poems bout it) but my mom died March 20th 2007. Merely months ago so she is what i mostly think of and write at this current time. docta, docta--we have a broken heart

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  • forever dreaming
    October 4, 2007

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    Although I asked for the use of proper grammar/punctuation etc I am going to overlook it in this case as the poem far outweighs those few minor negativites. It is a piece packed with emotion on what is obviously a very delicate subject for you to write about. I felt every ounce of your pain throughout the piece and the sense of longing with so strong throughout. I send you my deepest condolances and hope that you continue to keep up your strength through your pen. Many many thanks for entering my contest. Blessings to you. xx


  • Beating gold member
    September 10, 2007
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    so sad. I have people in my family who has been struggling with cancer, and I know the feeling of powerlessness, because there isn't much you can do.
    Very nicely written, although I'd rather have that you wrote why and not y, you and not u and also write I with capital. Other than that, great and sad write!


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    September 8, 2007
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    I am so sorry for your loss, the only gripe I have with this piece is the use of u instead of you.... I don't really like that, but it is a beautiful piece all the same

    Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck

    Karen


  • Ashleyxx
    September 7, 2007

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    I love your poem, it's really good. I'm so sorry about your mom, but I can relate to how you might feel because my granny died of cancer in February. I hope you're doing ok, and once again, awesome poem.


  • awannabepoet
    September 7, 2007

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    Love of family

    How you speak of the strongest of loves the bond between mother and daughter, how the heart aches in these verses that you have written for the love eternal of a mother will forever endure in your heart, mind and soul.

    Let her rest for now she is surely in heaven, god bless her soul and you will find solace in all these wonderful thoughts and endless little treasures you share with her in all of your living memories.

    I like it, I like it so.


  • Random Thoughts
    September 5, 2007
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    I can relate to the pain of this quite well,
    You have done such a fantastic job of expressing all this sentiment without losing control,
    A hugely heartfelt write about the greatest love of all, between parent and chid,
    Well done on a great entry and best of luck in this contest,

    -Brenden

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