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My addiction

[Baby] your {.m.y.} *addiction*


When [you] said it was o
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{I} just *  ;didnt; .w.a.n.t. to *listen*

{I} asked for one
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[Baby] your M.Y. *addiction*

[You] :walked: away (saying) its o
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[Are} [{* love *}] was like *fiction*

[Baby] I  [{Love}] [you] /why/ [you] wont be {my} *boyfriend*


[He] r
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{Baby} I'm in * love * with your *best-friend*

Author notes

This happened to me, and i hate my ex, but i love my best friend to death, and its not her fault hes just stupid!

teenagefailure

Pink bows, Pretty words, and pixie sticks"

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  • The Hardest Goodbye
    November 16, 2007

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    oh wow. This was an awesome dirty prettty write! so cool, i love the format of it. Keep it up
    xo
    kandy


  • danceswsquirrels
    October 12, 2007

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    2/3/4/3
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    3

    Thank you for following the rules and for entering! this was very nice! I hope you keep writing!


    J~~~


  • ChrissyJean
    October 4, 2007
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    Oh my gosh! I Love this poem! Good work.


  • xxlisajazminexx
    October 4, 2007

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    oh my

    for your best friend.....
    hunni, its her fault just as much as it is his fault....
    she knew he was your man right?
    and she went ahead and did whatever it was she did to have him be hers...
    shes no friend at all...
    dont let anyone treat you like a fool
    open your eyes and see whats happening....
    they BOTH betrayed you....
    she could have said NO SHES MY FRIEND BACK OFF
    but she didnt
    she let him
    and i am so sorry
    ...............
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    .......
    ....
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    thank you so much for entering this beautiful poem into my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Thank you again
    and good luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • forbidden-colour
    September 22, 2007
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    It would be better if you got rid of the extra punctuation.
    Thank you for entering.
    x


  • God is my reality
    September 16, 2007

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    That is so sad, but it happens so much. I love the form of it. It is great. I love it, and it is really sad. Some people are so stupid sometimes


  • Riftkin gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    this happens as teenagers and also when one grows older too

    thank you for a poem that I understood
    even if I know I will never be able to
    write like this

    Riftkin


  • Heartbeatsxfading
    September 5, 2007

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    Hmmm.

    This is sad indeed and all too common

    There are many correction to be made as far as spelling and honestly the punctuation gave me a bit of a headache.

    But it was still good.


  • whiterabbit.
    September 5, 2007

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    This is sad and I can imagine how that would hurt. I just need you to put your AP name in the notes. Good job.


  • Disturbedmess silver member
    September 5, 2007

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    wow, that is really good and it has such a good twist at the end. that was really good, i thought it was just simple breakup but you dont find out till the end what it truely is. good luck, and thanks for entering

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