Through the glass I stare
my heart was ripped in two
she walked away with a glare
saying I hate you
I found her with my friend
they were fooling around
my life is in a spin
in pain I now drown
Please tell me what you think
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wow- very saddening. a heartbreaking situation for anyone to find themselves in. i hope you know you're so much better off without her. a well written surge of emotion. i'm glad i stopped by...
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awww
such a deep well of emotion! I feel myself sinking with you, drowning in your pain. I can't say I know how you feel exactly (nobody ever does), but I can relate somewhat.
Unfortunately, women are evil. All of us. I admit it, we are conniving, self-serving bitches.
But aren't we so wonderfully sexy and inspiring too?
I like your rhyme scheme (surprisingly - not a fan of rhyme), and I also like your simple style - it seems tasteful.
Well done, Tom!
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aww
short but packs a powerful punch.
but life is just one big open door now
can't wait to read more.
Tasha
xo
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I feel so bad now. Your poem makes me so depressed. Great write, just quite depressing.
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Aww man, u poor guy. But from something bad came a great write. Welcome 2 AP, hope u have a good time.
~Lorissa~
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Awe... That is awful loosing 2 people in one
blow. OUCH... If this is true here is a
delila
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Aww, this is so sad! The last two lines end the poem well. It is the ultimate pain when someone cheats on you...but to have it be your friend...I don't know what I would do. I am so sorry Things will get better, and you will find someone 10 times better, I promise!
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too sad...feeling sorry
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So hurtful...
Im sorry that she broke your heart and was messing with your friend. She probably wasnt the right one for you anyway. you will find someone better for you out there.
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things happen... at least that friend wasn't another girl... i had a guy leave me cuz he was gay. now THAT hurt. i didn't know what to think. i'm so sorry for that, but it was a good write. you write various things that all seem to center around the different aspects of love. it's fantastic. greatly penned.
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So sorry
This is so awful, I am so sorry to hear that someone would be cruel enough to rip out your heart and tare it into a million pieces.
You are a good writer and have expressed your emotions well. Feel better
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wow this is amzing. i'm realy sorry. no one shold ever have to go thro this! you are an amzing wrighter! keep pening.
live neatsa.
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AWW
I can almost feel your pain, You do write good, and I really hope you feel better. -
"But lift yourself out
Dont let her hold your heart
It was not your fault it ended
She was the one who ripped you apart
Dont give in to your sorrow
Learn to love and let go
Love can come with heartache
But its a pain you learn to know"
Great write! you inspired me to write
I absolutely loved this! write more. I cant wait to read!
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Oh my gosh this is so sad but it is a very good write.Life is not always easy and when you are let down by the one that loves you.Thanks for sharing.
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No, its not easy, but I will go on, thank yoou for the comment.
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