Elusive as the celestial winds of the deepest constellations
This space and time is parallax of our attraction
Lost within your eyes, you send divine interpretation
Through my mind
Shifting, mind traveling
as the skies above me lift me
From the terra firma of security
We are one
Our elliptic transformation revolves constantly
Within our hearts, within our being
Like two stars awaiting the ultimate demise or recreation
From the refractive glow of your inner aurora
With its mosaic luminosity
It blinds my sanity into forever loving you
Leaving me in a free flowing atmosphere of contentment
Author notes
If the universe were my soul and mate
In a list
A contest entry
- The Universe by alexandrathegreat.
1300 points, ended September 18, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"Lost within your eyes, you send divine interpretation through my mind..."...stunned me, these words did...I had a thought recently very close to this...and this also makes me remember the scripture of 'one day we will see him face to face...and will be known'...eerily beautiful writing and the added image of the stars...I'm all atingle...nice work, Michael...Peace, Rhonda
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"It blinds my sanity into forever loving you
Leaving me in a free flowing atmosphere of contentment"
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BTW - thank you for the kind words ~
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Good work...Bravo!
This is beautiful. Very imaginative. I loved it. Job well done. Keep it up.
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Thanks a lot. this was a bit odd but I wanted to do some kind of cosmos feel to it.
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BREATH TAKING
Powerful piece of work you have here my friend...It blinds my sanity into forever loving you Leaving me in a free flowing atmosphere of contentment...sighs...Wonderful!!!
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This was actual for another contest with a lot of word prompts but I wanted to make it my own. They wanted some kinda Sci Fi thing but the universe is a living thing and you have to address it as such. I think.
Thanks for the great review ~ Mykey
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Nice pic, this background is better. ;
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LOL!! the other was by default
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The first line took me back a couple steps in wonder, it was beautiful and a great start, really woke me up. This is exactly what I was looking for poetic, and smart at the same time, thank you for entering.
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Thank U - my computer is running sloooooow so You read it while I was still editing lol!! Thank you for the great comments
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