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Empty Wings

Splintered ice from empty wings
To go is just to come again
To play is to be silent
To hear is to speak
Cold stare
The end may be blue
But its heart is dark black
Falling to the barren ground
Splintered ice from empty wings

Author notes

I tried to make this a visual poem as well as normal. The lines are supposed to make wings by their long to short to long again.

I wonder how I did!

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  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 5, 2007

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    Beautifully dark poem. I liked the form you used as well. It was an interesting poem, I like how you made it come back full circle. Thanks for entering the contest.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~