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One So Young

As the days are numbered

Time has elapsed

Instability of life

Heart and spirit collapse

 Laughter is lost

Through Soaring Emotion

Tears of sadness

With unlikely potion

 Hourglass shattered

The Sands of departure

A life of memories

Innocent and immature

 Here at this hour

Beyond reason and doubt

A life so fragile

Been lost and forced out

 

I

 

Understand

 One so young

Author notes

LadyLeviathan

Here is a backround to this poem. I have a painting that sits on my wall. It is titled one so young. The artist is my uncle Arthur Arturo Pina. Who painted words to which no one understood. "ONE SO YOUNG" he painted on his death bed due to aids. He was only 25 years old. After years of reading outloud the words on my wall, I realize he was crying for help. Why did he have to die at such a young age? ONE SO YOUNG. To this day the painting sits on my wall...and tears still come to my eyes when I read it.

"One so young
Does anyone care?
One so young
Do we understand
One so young
Please god
I am one so young"

Arthur Auturo Pina

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  • doesne1care
    January 25, 2008
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    wow! i can imagine the painting! reali liked it!


  • CherryOnTop
    October 25, 2007
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    This is so sad and yet a beautiful piece of work.


  • Arizona Sunset
    October 15, 2007

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    Very sad, and very emotional, yes that is such a young age to lose his life. Many times people ignore the cries of others, until it is too late, but you have grown from this experience, and maybe have now learned to hear the crys of the wounded more...excellent write, beautiful dedication, and ~blessings to you~


  • Gwenevere
    September 30, 2007
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    Excellent

    Sad but really well written.I enjoyed reading this.Very well done, Ros

  • celadia
    September 26, 2007

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    Tragic

    Loved the poem, even though it made me sad to think of, however, that is life and one of my neighbors died of AIDS, so I know the feeling. He was young too.


  • JOSHv3
    September 16, 2007

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    Wow i really loved this poem too once again good luck with your book...And thank you for entering my contest! This was very deep and just makes you ask so many questions

  • piccola silver member
    September 14, 2007
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    Really deep and touching. It brings to mind many questions and makes us think ... thank you.


  • kennethlaney
    September 12, 2007
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    Another SAD one Jasmine!

    But it was a beautiful thought for your Uncle!


  • BeautifullyBroken42
    September 10, 2007

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    i really luv this poem with the way the words flow into perspective. its great!


  • individuality gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    it would be nice to see the painting that you have written this poem on - nevertheless, the poem speaks nicely your thoughts. a good piece.


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    September 7, 2007
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    get old, get rich. and enjoy jasmine life is great..even when not young.. hugs .. good one xx pp


  • queens1
    September 7, 2007

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    Inspiring.

    To think what else your young uncle would have accomplished in his short life. You have given meaning to his words so that others my understand and draw inspiration from them.
    Patty


  • Thomas20
    September 5, 2007
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    This is absolutely beautiful, just like the woman that wrote it, I enjoyed reading the entire poem.

  • Justin3
    September 5, 2007

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    This is such a heartfelt poem, I like the way you drew inspiration from such a personal aspect of your life, you've turned sadness into art.Nicely done.

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