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Diamonds are… for Peggy and Keith

 

 

Preciousmost of all gems that miners seeK,
Ever esteemed for their bright elegancE,
Glitter unchanging – as sang LoreleI
Gladly we name “Diamond” this bright feasT –,
Years since their wedding day – three score, in trutH.

Kindred and friends hail loving fellowshiP,
Extol youth’s love, ripened to years maturE.
In wartime danger was their love’s beginninG;
Through six long decades that love, ever-flowerinG,
Has blessed their lives with joyful harmonY.

Precious such love – in tempest, a sure arK ,
Eden reborn, each day, each year, each decadE;
Gone sixty years since wedding day’s confettI,
Glittering diamonds now fletch Cupid’s darT
Yes, this love shines as brilliantly as in youtH.

Kind Jesus, Who to fill a marriage cuP
Empty too soon, turned water into winE,
In this bright hour we thank Thee for Thy blessinG
To them bestowed: love constant and unchanginG.
Holy, indeed, is such true matrimonY.

Author notes

I do not know if this will fit the requirements of your competition. since I was not lucky enough to have a "lasting love".. But at least I can recognize and honour those who have...


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  • This is impressive!

  • Vera Rich
    May 28
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    PLEASE READ THIS NOTE

    As my gold membership has run out (and having recently been mugged and robbed I cannot afford the luxury of renewing it) I cannot alter what is in the "Writer's notes" box, since doing so will destroy the rich text layout of this poem - for which, as you will see, the colour is rather important.

    I hope this fits your concept of celebration!

  • My teacher in my assignments acrostics showed this to me. I really liked the way you wrote this. I don't think I have seen this form before. It is interesting. Thanks for sharing this with us.

    • Vera Rich
      May 18
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      Well, it was rather useful that the couple in question both had five-letter names. (And "Peggy" really is the bride's legal name- in her case it is not an abbreviation for Margaret.)


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    October 22, 2008
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    I love this you really did a great awesome job with this good luck in the contest


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    October 1, 2008
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    INCREDIBLE!!

    Absolutely remarkable!

    WOWNESS!

    Um, ok, constructivity now...
    I really likes the idea of the happy couple, everything seeming so lovely, and the way they are eternall;y connected.

    One of the cleverest pieces of work I'[ve seen in a long time.

    Thank You.

  • Judith Chandler
    July 26, 2008

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    This acroteleostic form is very impressive and shows the same sort of commitment and hard work as 60 years of marriage. I can only imagine!

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Darkwell
    July 23, 2008
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    this is brillient! an now i know a new word acroteleostic its a good think peggy an keith had the same number of letters

    just, WOW

    Magnificently
    Attempted
    Solution
    That
    Easily
    Reads
    Poetically
    In
    Every
    Clear
    Exhale

    Good luck in the contest!

  • Vera Rich
    July 13, 2008
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    I am not sure whether a wedding anniversary fits your requirements... but in case it does, I am putting this i...


  • Shenanigans
    June 5, 2008

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    WOW!! This one is great. So heartening to see love that lasts. Excellent work, and good luck in the contest.

    --Shannon


  • tony yates silver member
    March 10, 2008
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    clever

    well crafted, the words are skillfully written, well done


  • Shancy Fayre
    February 25, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry. Shancy.

  • Honeydew
    February 21, 2008

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    wow

    nicely written....and i agree no explanation needed on this.this was a real challenge i,m sure..i like acrostic poems myself and find they can be difficult..so great job on this double acrostic!thank you for entering my contest!


  • CelticQueen
    January 25, 2008
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    A double acrostic masterfully done. Good job!

    celtic queen


  • Jamaica
    January 23, 2008
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    Very creative peace of art.

    What a lovely code.


  • micol
    January 21, 2008

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    A wonder--technical tour de force that matches the occasion and the thought. Binding the couple in each stanza, tying them together in words that evoke their history together...wonderful.

    And now a richly deserved Gold. Congratulations.


  • TillyMay
    January 20, 2008

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    Wow- good stuff, this.

    Wow- and I don't say that lightly. Even if you had not conformed to such a challenging form of acrostic- this poem would be amazing. I always appreciate a good vocabularly and when one can string those beautiful words together, tell a story AND do it in a strict form- I am impressed. So often, in an attempt to really fit the form, the poetry suffers and the lines feel forced- you don't have a single akward moment in this piece.
    This is as beautiful as it is well crafted. Cheers for the entry and welcome to the finalist's list.

    • Vera Rich
      January 29, 2008
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      Thank you for your appreciation - and for the gold award...


  • takemypainaway
    December 1, 2007
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    very good... you did a nice job!! im sorry for not including our name!!!

  • poetrysheartbreak
    October 31, 2007

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    Yes this most certainly does count. And what a wonderful creative dedication it is. This is just simply amazing. How long did it take you to write this beautiful piece of work?


  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 27, 2007

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    Excellente' I love the ingenuity instilled within or should I say without as borders, great idea, truly spectacular, an honor lol Congrats also upon your trophy

  • L000
    September 12, 2007
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    Ahhh I love acrossticks - gorgeous write, keep penning . and GOOD LUCK


  • ma belle
    September 10, 2007

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    What an astounding, exquisite wedding anniversary poem for this couple of 60 years! I particularly took a liking to the hearty blessing in the last stanza (most spiritual and forthright). The poetic form seemed challenging--something few of us might undertake (speaking for myself, mostly). This is simply marvelous, Vera. Trust you are faring well these days. My best, Belle


  • myrataal silver member
    September 10, 2007

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    This is BRILLIANT!

    As true diamonds usually are ... You are truly a gem and this is a shimmering winner.

    Hope all is well with you, dearest Vera ...

    Love
    Myra

    • Vera Rich
      September 10, 2007
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      Thank you... all is more or less well with me... that is to say, healthwise I am gradually - though very slowly - gaining strength. However, I am under huge pressure to finish certain jobs that are horribly overdue; publishers and editors who were most understanding while I was ill, now perceive me to be fit for a normal workload - and are now all pressing me!

      So what strength and energy I have regained is immediately expended on long hours of work...


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 8, 2007
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    Beautiful, and I loved the clever use of the names, a beautiful testiment to a life long love. My parents married for 47 years, and would have loved to have 50 together, however sadly my father passed last year, but I find beauty in love that can last Excellent write, I enjoyed this very much, you have beautiful imagery! Thank you for this diamond of a read!


  • annamoy
    September 6, 2007

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    Very clever the way you have written this acrostic poem and the sentiments are fitting for a lovely diamond wedding celebration, that will be appreciated for years to come. Best of luck in the contest.


  • heygoo
    September 5, 2007

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    It absolutely counts! I really like the double, no triple, no octagonal acoustic. Must have taken a lot of time. Very nice effort. I'm sure the couple was thrilled to read it. Congratulations to Keith & Peggy. A true testament of love and commitment.

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