How many of us have clearly survived,
Before we learned the dangers of lead paint?
Many Chinese kids are plainly alive;
Are they protected by a Chinese Saint?
Perhaps it`s the cause of obesity
In the Americans prone to gain weight
Lead is very dense elementally
How many fatsos have you seen iceskate?
How proud we are of the progress we`ve made;
Politically correct and big boned
Perhaps the Chinese kids must avoid jade.
We have had enough, just leave us alone.
T`was only cowboys, died from lead poison;
Must I illustrate another symtom?
Author notes
Don`t lick your pencil, as I recall;
was a stern warning, ignored by all
A contest entry
- Sonnets, sonnets, and more sonnets by RatherImaginative.
1925 points, ended September 8, 2007, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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My Dear Watson...
El-e-men-tal-ly like Pol-i-ti-cal-ly are both five syllable words, though hardly synonymous...I do have a question though; what is the term used to describe words like lead and lead, as illustrated in the following sentence?
'Lead poisoning can lead to death.' It has been almost fifty years since Sister Dominica taught that class and the answer eludes me, or perhaps graphite posesses the same detriments as lead.
'Don`t lick your pencil', as I recall,
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The 2nd line of the third stanza is missing a syllable.
It's a wonder, with all the dangerous stuff they are discovering in commonly used items nowadays, that ANY of us survived past childhood. Your sonnet made me smile, both humorously and wryly. I loved the couplet. Yes, that kind of lead so applied could be deadly indeed, as we still see today. Thanks so much for entering my contest! -
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I beg to differ
My reply to your comment is on the wrong page.
Please refer above, with computers not sage. -
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(smiling) I might have misunderstood the point of the couplet. You mentioned cowboys and death by lead in the same sentence, and my thought was of six-shooters and show-downs in the center of town. To answer your question, would the word be "homonym"?
And thanks for editing!
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