heart-shaped leaves jump
on suicide-pact missions
scattering themselves like
seed on alabaster paths --
hansel and gretel fashion
they are sepia reminders
of how far we've come
and what songs we were singing
when seasons sublimed like
butterfly-wings decomposing.
Author notes
Option 2A: this autumn image.
Originally written to this photo in Kandy's contest.
xx
A contest entry
- Autumn Dew Memories ~ PIF quickie by Namita.
300 points, ended September 7, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PIF Contest Now allowing PreWrites IF they go with the options by Amorous Arms.
600 points, ended September 16, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
critical comments are most welcome.
Comments
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I think I have officially fallen head-over-heels in love with your writing.
Bookmarking this one, too.
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Oh my days! This is brilliant! I love the lines - how far we've come and what songs we were singing!
the quick fairy tale reference was very welcome as well.
I really enjoy this.
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Metaphorically magnificent!!! I can’t get a hold of myself. How truly beautiful, captivating even! I don’t know how to write like this. But I seem to have been inspired by the deep exquisiteness in this piece. So, I thank you for that. I really like nature poems, their so inspiring… I especially like this one.
Have a good one.
-Blanche
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cute. i loved it. so sweet and loving. wonderful write.. thanks for entering =] best wishes
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Wonderful. Great penning and good luck in my contest,
Luv,
Candy
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Wow...
So, so awesome. There is not one line in this that I don't completely adore. The last stanza just completely captivates me.
~Shadow-Phoenix.
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Thanks a million.
Your comments are so lovely every time. 
And my internet died at home, so I'm in a free at school.
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O forgot to you
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You know in case of new words and alliteration I would say, your first para is a killer. But poetry is not about words only-we both know, so for that you have penned a stellar ending. I loved your metaphoric parallel and allusion, it shows movement and visuals(colors, sound,yada yada and yada ).
Very well done You made me happy.
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Mmmm, thanks for your beautiful, insightful comment.
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Okay, just reminding you, you have about more than 12 hours to finish your poem.
Luv,
Candy
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Yup, 'tis done now.
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