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mother nature's sun

beating upon me
the sun helps find me shelter
casting its shadows

trees bearing their leaves
gently falling to the ground
becoming the earth

Sparkling rivers flow
through waterfalls and ravines
never losing hope


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  • Riftkin gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    you were need to breat the Haiku
    up into three different poems for it to go as a trio of haikus

    Riftkin


  • Swan song gold member
    September 8, 2007

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    Again this is like one poem in triplits. It is very discriptive and full of imagery but I can't say that it is not three poems. It is very good however and I enjoyed reading this.