Antique as old as
the first born star
an ancient jewel to be precise
Family heirloom
that nobody knows
to what the hidden meaning is
It shines and glimmers
never having a single brake
to help regenerate it's glow
A clue comes down
it's ruby red...
no wait it changed to blue
A treasure too perplexing
the mystery never revealed
prohibitive enough not to understand..
Author notes
option 4
made up family heirloom/antique either way
A contest entry
- ~*~ Whimsical poems -- 8 great options! ~*~ by twinkling of an eye.
560 points, ended September 21, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very nice work! Your description was very good -- I could almost see this item in my mind, and yet there was still a strong sense of mystery around it. Well done! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Wonderful imagery! I love the first two lines, "as old as the first born star" that's beautiful. Then you go on to describe a mystical puzzle that is appreciated but not fully understood. Stonecold is a good title. That's what caught my eye. It's important to have a good title ~ and you do!
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the poem gives me an image of a gem, and its definitly interesting. i want to see a picture of this, i want to know what it is. i hope that was the aim, good work
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