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Fatality~

                             Shadows cast spells,

                             through séance channels...


                             Tears frozen from tarnished years.

                             A choppy chime,

                             seeps inside an open ear

 

                             severing a once sanctum soul.

                             An intimate evening of reddish hues
                             her lying heart eclipsed the moon

                             Frightened; cowers the child in the dark
                             for he must walk alone within’ his heart.

                             In memories footprints,

                             I drag my shadow

                             Succumbed with emptiness,

                             heartache and sorrow

                             A routine of which I can’t break free
                             like prometheus; chained to destiny

                             Welcomed home by the harbinger of woe
                             everyday like this, leaves no tomorrow.

                             "Every day like this,

 

                                                           leaves no tomorrow..."

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  • Angelflower
    February 16

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    wow, you two really did a great job.. this was a touch of dark and a touch of just wow..Lol. I couldn't really tell where one left off and the other began! you two did such a wonderful job.. thank you both much for sharing!

    Angel


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    April 29, 2008

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    my this was deliciously dark Tim i think you write very well with this artist i saw a better version of your style


  • Inspyred
    March 24, 2008
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    chills

    everytimei read one of ur poems i get chills lol you're very VERY good


  • raggyann
    February 7, 2008
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    this is realy different from what you usualy do and i like it alot
    you did it well


  • Swan song gold member
    October 14, 2007
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    This was very deep and completely and totally excellent. You sir are one very good poet!!!


  • TexasMomma
    October 8, 2007
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    very nice piece....I like your writing style......keep up the wonderful work!


  • islekine gold member
    September 18, 2007

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    Extremely captivating.

    Music to both eyes and mind. Bravo! Collab onward!
    Or as we say here, Hana Hou! (encore)
    *PEACE*


  • Swan song gold member
    September 16, 2007

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    This is a really good poem There is a ton to this poem that is very good and i see no weaknessin it at all
    You left enough mystery in this work to make the reader pay attention and make up his or her own mind
    That is always a good thing


  • Blue Azure
    September 13, 2007

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    wow. well i liked this from the start, beautfilly stark and dark. but it really kicked in best for me from
    Frightened; cowers the child in the dark
    for he must walk alone within’ his heart.
    i loved the end. this is the best poem i have read so far today. thanks for sharing, shall def be looking at some more of your work.


  • OctoberCrush
    September 10, 2007

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    It reads very well...
    Almost as if I should hear piano in the background...

    And the ending lines really just bring it all together,
    It pulled me in until the end.


    I really loved it*** Truly


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    September 9, 2007

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    Whoo, yeah, this is the dark creeping through the veins, just sending a bit of chill down the spine. But, you got it in ya to write anything. Excellent collab, this just hits all the right notes.
    Wonderfully done, both of you.
    Storm


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    September 5, 2007

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    It reads like a dark Ballad..On a stormy night and castles looming in the back...Death waiting and a broken heart...Shadows cast but no life...What a write you two have done!...Excellent!!!


  • Jalalbad gold member
    September 5, 2007

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    You always leave your footprint

    your writing knows no limits. I like all of this poem not because of the subject matter but because of the subject it was written by.
    Smile poeticweaver you are that subject.
    Judy


  • tara wilson gold member
    September 5, 2007
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    Excellent...I love the presentation, a wonderful collab!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    September 5, 2007

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    Very Beautiful!!!

    This is such an intense poem, I'll be reading it again for its full effect to sink into my brain... You've penned another masterpiece, Brother!!! Peace and Love, Cyn


  • Amera gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    Oh my... you opened your closet and you chose the cloke of the darke genre and you wear it well! This is wonderful especially for a co-write. I couldn't tell who wrote what. It is very smooth with a choppy structure breaking up couplets with single lines that adds to the foreboding image.
    Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • poet2angels gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    You are so great at every type of poem, even dark....And this collab is amazing!
    Great job on this, my Bro!


    Lynda


  • penman gold member
    September 4, 2007
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    Powerful

    A very dark and intense right. Wonderful flow and images.


  • Hetha gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    Wow!

    A powerful and emotional collaboration, that was well written! This is very different from your usual, but you wear the dark cloak quite well. You and your collab partner! Great job you two!


  • oldphotosonlybringt
    September 4, 2007

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    ♥

    great wright dad i loved it bunches it was really kool i liked reading it the background is good to, much love..xoxox


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    Amazing Tim!
    This was one of those poems
    wish i had written.
    I loved the darkness of it, i don't know why,
    but i read it slowly and it suited the sombre of it.
    The metaphor was re-readabley brilliant, (Did i invent a new word there?)
    I loved it all but to sat the best, well last four
    i found outstanding.
    "Everyday like this
    leaves no tomorrow"

    Did you read how good that was!
    Great job i loved it.
    Slán Dolores xx


  • delightfulmess silver member
    September 4, 2007

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    OMG what a intense interweaving of words.
    Well done This is a wonderful collab. WOW WOW
    Great job you two Great poetic minds for sure



    delila


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    September 4, 2007

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    Oh wow..scary dark and so very cold..kinda creepy..
    Very well written bravo...
    Best wishes
    Peace
    ~A~


  • 245Trioxin
    September 4, 2007

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    I can dig it. It's a little above my intellect, but I particularly enjoy the beginning.


  • Stardust-luvr
    September 4, 2007

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    well done sweetheart - you both have done an awesome job as with the way I have been feeling lately the following lines hit my heart with tears and I don't think I can express to you the reasons of the tears without sending more tears shed:
    Tears frozen from tarnished years.

    In memories footprints,
    I drag my shadow

    Succumbed with emptiness,
    heartache and sorrow


    Welcomed home by the harbinger of woe
    everyday like this, leaves no tomorrow.

    "Every day like this,

    leaves no tomorrow..."


    Well done honey!! much love forever always xoxoxoxoxo


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    beautiful piece


  • Griswold silver member
    September 4, 2007

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    Very well done Brother Tim. An excellent collaboration indeed, a bit on the dark side. I dont do dark very often. But when I do it's usually a doozie!!! Scott


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    this was indeed awesome. Loved it when i heard it. and seeingit knocks my socks off...although no offense the pic scares the shit out of me, literally had to change great job


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    o0o0o this was an amazing collab
    you two work really well together
    this was dark and myserious
    and beautifully written
    well done

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