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The Seven Sisters Who Never Went to Heaven


Luxuria could not cloak her red rose attraction,
And Invidia only festered in lack of satisfaction.
Avaritia and Gula bathed in a stagnant pool of lies,
Red-headed Ira had fiery will and blood-thirsty eyes,
While Acedia gave heed to no passion at all,
And Superbia lived in a cage with a mirrored wall.
Lonely were the lives of these seven, poor sisters who never went to Heaven.



Author notes

The number seven has always been my favorite because it is the number of completion. The Book of Revelations in the Bible has always intrigued me because of it's symbolic usage of it.

This was sort of written like a dark nursery rhyme like Ring Around the Rosey.

Seven Deadly sins: Luxuria (lust), Gula (gluttony), Avaritia (greed), Acedia (sloth), Ira (wrath, more commonly known as anger), Invidia (envy), and Superbia (pride).

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  • carole21
    February 28, 2008

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    very good

    very good use for the seven deadly sins . . well done . . liked "Lonely were the lives of these seven" and "poor sisters who never went to heaven" . . congrats on the trophy as well . .


  • Swan song gold member
    October 14, 2007
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    This was cool. Not only are you poetic but intelligent What a treat this is Congrats on the gold

  • celadia
    September 4, 2007

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    Fantastic

    I just LOVED this poem, I thought it was very clever and you show good visual images, YOu could probably write a poetry book for young people, I think they would like your style a lot as it sounds a lot like storytelling. A wonderful poem.


  • AnotherName
    September 4, 2007

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    You are the clever poet with this poem. I love the rhyme! I also love the fact that you have used the seven deadly sins as a prompt. That makes the work all the more interesting. You have done very well here. I thank you for entering my contest. Good Luck!

    April


    • Shahrazad
      September 11, 2007
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      Thank you so much for gold! It means so much to me. I'm glad you enjoyed this short poem


      • AnotherName
        September 13, 2007
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        Did you manage to post your own pay it forward contest yet? Let me know when you do. You won fair and square. I loved this!


        April

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