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Goddess of heartbreak

My heart is the ice which paints
My fingers the guild of pastels
My eyes see what you wish to be
From them fall the hollow tears

I am  the goddess of heartbreak
I hold your love within my hands
I am the one that freezes desire
Taking away what you hold dear

You are the person who wishes
You are the one deeply in love
You are about to be deeply hurt
Losing your soul to my sorrow

Here I dance on your heart
Surrounded in broken dreams
Here I lock you in my world
My place of broken hearts and lost souls

Author notes

I wrote this for a contest, but upon finishing it, I realised
crap instead of being a happy poem its turned the way of sad, so im adding it here instead of the recycle bin

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  • Dragons Lady
    September 7, 2007

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    This is a great piece. The sadness is felt but it's not that depressing. Almost a relief as if a cold crisp winter breeze has cleared the air. Wonderful imagery and smooth flow. Thank you for sharing.


  • Despairkitty
    September 6, 2007

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    lol..my poems always seem to turn the way of sad. This was a great piece though and I am glad you posted it. It reminded me of the cold that is to be coming soon and that makes me happy. I do love the winter.
    Despair


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 6, 2007

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    This poem was indeed not for the recycle bin
    Shows My Place of broken hearts.... and dreams?
    Good write x

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    Oh my gosh this is still a very good piece. It she be place here where it belongs not in a recycle bin I can understnad your feelings thanks for sharing.