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Vacancy

I am lost in a silent wonderland,
all comprehension leaves my mind,
an empty basin longing for that waters droplet.
Nothing to think, speak or hear,
no reason nor feeling lingering in my train of thought,
all have left so long ago.
Sitting contemplating why,
yet nothing coming forth, no resolution to be seen.
Wanting, waiting for something to be thought,
even a thought of imperfection, lust or sin.
Anything, nothing comes to mind,
a blank parchment that might as well be set a flame.
Even if a match should find this aging parchment, and set it a light,
maybe then a thought, a word, at least a burning memory.
The ink placed so carefully upon the table might as well spill over, 

covering the useless parchment,
for it seems the longing quill has no use for it here.
Shall time pass as my mind stands still,
transfixed upon the empty basin, the blank parchment, the useless ink?
My written word is lost within my mind,
the only expression that I have.

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  • motel silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    love how you wrote about the "struggle" & how pointless it is to continute to fight. I know from my own experience, when I sometimes loosen my grip on the paper & pen, & invite life in with an open hand, that is when the true process starts. thanks.


  • Makinbettachoices
    December 12, 2007

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    awesome, I love it!
    This reminds me of something called monkey mind, its like you take a pen and paper and right down all your thoughts and let it keep flowing, letting each thought spin off from the next, except there is a catch, you cant let the pen stop writing. It reminds me of that because you just took an idea and ran with it and it kept flowing so beautifully, it fit so well, it happened to belong there, it was like free flowing thoughts and words and expression. and it was the most unique and careful way to let them out! I love it! keep it up, awesome job, i cant express how perfect it is! truly! well deserving of the gold and all your trophies!
    x from the ashes x


  • Naridill
    December 11, 2007

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    Sad and reflective. A very abstract piece. It was creative and very intriguing in the word choice and phrasing. Nicely done. I really enjoyed reading, thanks for sharing and congrats on previous Gold and Honorable Mentions.


  • michichoeret
    December 11, 2007
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    great

    expecially liked the juntaposition of burning memories and setting fire to the blank parchment


  • Tarja
    December 10, 2007

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    Congrats on the gold and two honorable mention trophies. This was so original and I enjoyed it very much. I wasn't altogether sure what it was about but that's one good thing about it. Thanks for the read.


  • Lj-
    November 28, 2007
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    Interesting.


    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.

  • michaeline
    November 26, 2007

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    So sad and reflectional.You did a great job on this one and I wish you luck on the contest.Brought out feelings that I too have had and made me hope that I never get that way again.


  • crystallynnbradford
    October 30, 2007

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    (jaw dropped)

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  • Willowhaunt
    October 6, 2007

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    It really does depict a vacancy...I love it. I love the imagery, and how this poem and all of its images and concepts really fit together to make sense. Well written.

    Keep Quilling,
    Whiskey


  • forever dreaming
    October 4, 2007
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    Sounds exactly like me at the moment with my vacant mind and loss for words. So many could relate to this at tmies when what we know we want to say just will not spring forth from that well of inspiration. Very well structured poem with excellent imagery. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 26, 2007
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    Wonderfully penned. I think a lot would relate to this. Good luck in the contest.


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    This was another one of your best works. I think we all have felt this way from time to time. I know I have. I think the greatest feeling in the world is when you get out of that slump. I can see why this piece won a gold trophy. Very well done.
    I really liked the lines "The ink placed so carefully upon the table might as well spill over,
    covering the useless parchment,
    for it seems the longing quill has no use for it here."
    With writing like this coming out of you, it looks like your writers block has ended.
    Again, very well done.


  • Kati Kat
    September 20, 2007
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    thanxies for the entry
    i love it
    it really made me think a lot
    good job sweetheart


  • MargaretG
    September 19, 2007

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    This is the feeling exactly. I like the metaphors you have chosen for it,
    "Even if a match should find this aging parchment, and set it a light,
    maybe then a thought, a word, at least a burning memory."
    but there is nothing to say, and nothing to be done.
    Congratulations for the gold, this was a pleasure to read.


  • Denierim
    September 17, 2007

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    This was a longish and tough to read piece but well worth it. I loved the way you were able to put to words the very escence of a writer's block. I've had it so many times but have never been truly able to describe it to anyone. You did a fine work with that. Good job and good luck to the contest!


  • Kram
    September 10, 2007

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    resonances

    though it is lengthy it resonances the mind , and suffocates due to the lonelyness ,,, good write ..and good luck


  • Swan song gold member
    September 8, 2007

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    I love the content of this poem I would however try to give it some form by adding run on lines to some of the very long lines in this and putting it into stanzas


  • Nephalaneous lover
    September 6, 2007

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    "I am lost in a silent wonderland,"and"The ink placed so carefully upon the table might as well spill over,
    covering the useless parchment,"
    are my fav parts...great write


  • MemoryRose
    September 5, 2007
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    Really sweet

    I really like it, impressive


  • paullallady silver member
    September 5, 2007
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    I really enjoyed this poem. You captured the essence of that feeling, that wanting, very well. My favorite part is:
    "The ink placed so carefully upon the table might as well spill over,
    covering the useless parchment,
    for it seems the longing quill has no use for it here."
    Good luck in my contest!!


  • TwilightDazzles
    September 4, 2007

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    This is a very great poem. I have felt this way many a times.

    "I am lost in a silent wonderland, all comprehension leaves my mind"

    What brilliant words!! Also, it's a very great attention grabber!! Magnificent job! Good luck in the contest


  • Rose-Quartz
    September 4, 2007

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    An Excellent Poem

    This is so good, it makes the loss of poetic thought into something of real beauty. If anything can inspire someones muse, I'm sure your eloquent words can. Thankyou for sharing this excellent poem with me. I wish you all Good Luck in the contest. All my very best wishes from Rose xx


  • Rose-Quartz
    September 4, 2007
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    An Excellent Poem

    This is so good, it makes the loss of poetic thought into something of real beauty. If anything can inspire someones muse, I'm sure your eloquent words can. Thankyou for sharing this excellent poem with me. I wish you all Good Luck in the contest. All my very best wishes from Rose xx

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