There were no last words, no dying lament or truth unveiled.
Just an uncomfortable silence, accompanied by a blank stare.
There was no recognition, no regret for misspent decades.
Just you and I, accompanied by a sterile room and scent.
There was no reconciliation, no apologies or hints of remorse.
Just the damn waiting, accompanied by impending death.
There were no tears, no grief or sense of loss.
Just an empty body, accompanied by memories to be buried.
There were no wounds left, no bruises or emotional scars.
Just long awaited healing, accompanied by hope and a smile.
Please tell me what you think
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Death & peace
the sad part is that will all do not gt to find that peace. Great write. Does make me think about omethings
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Great Write!
LOL, this reads like the death of a phone book, or something equally inanimate. YIKES! I sure hope this isn't my woman bidding me a not-so-fond farewell!
"Just the damn waiting..." that's funny! Oh my, that has to be true of more than a few marriages, though. I mean, I'm sure that in at least 10% of marriages the surviving spouse is probably tempted to immolate the dying spouse in their hospital bed. "Oh, sorry Harry, did I set your cast on fire?"
The deadpan demeanor throughout this piece is only ruined by a little hope and a smile at the end. I was hoping that the last line was waiting for a truck to take the casket to the landfill!
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I really like your poem in the abstract sence. You create beautiful abstract lines with hints of a concrete story. It makes the images sadder. Your poem kept me wanting more, for good and for bad I say. Were they lovers or family? Why the "bruises" ect? I am not directly asking you. I just wanted to know more while I was reading the piece. Ok I am tired and ready for bed.
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Strong....Intense......even!
I just LOVE This..........I can relate.
When someone has cut us to the spirit and then we aren't rid of it. Yes. I get it. Oh, goodness.
Excellent piece. Well written, with an even 'thread' of continuity. I need to feature this so others can click, read, and give their take on it.
By the way, you should see your piece to the RIGHT of this screen under "Featured Poems". Don't click your own poem, as it costs points to do so. Just go to your author's page should you want to see the comments.
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