THE DRINKING POEM
We're all drunk tonight
Oh what a great delight!
All week we were lazy
Now we'll all dance like crazy!
We will yell and shout
And stumble all about!
We might get in a fight
Cause we're high as a kite!
Some will fall to the floor
Others go home with whore's.
Over and over we take a leak
Never to return to the same seat.
Don't dare leave in your car
Call a taxi from the bar.
Tommorow our clothes will show
We've been somewhere no one should go.
The next night comes around
Again we'll act like a clown.
Now I don't want to guess
So I'll take the pregnancy test.
A contest entry
- Make Me Laugh ( Adult 18+ ) by Jfd.
300 points, ended September 9, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Bar Scene (Adult) by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended September 25, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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rhyme and flow is good here
Now I don't want to guess
So I'll take the pregnancy test.
Oh do you truly think
That it will stop you next week
Riftkin -
Oh, dear, you are playing with fire
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that is pretty funny, i wish you all the best in that contest. this sounds like a winner right here. the flow and the ryhme is great. and i couldnt help but laugh at the end. which is unusual for me, considering what i usually write and read. that almost sounds like me and my friends this past weekend. i went home for the weekend and the three of us got trashed, but its not like we were goin out anywhere, we stayed in her apartment, but im sure if they would have video taped us that night, it would have been a sight to see. haha... once again, this is a great write.
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I would not be laughing if I had to take a pregnancy test. Thats just me though, but the rest of the poem was great and shows what it's like to be drunk and having oh so much fun. Well done.
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haha funny.....you've covered everything someone might encounter in a night of drinking! thanks for entering!
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Oh no!!! Its funny but then again its not
Wow, do the other competition have something to worry about!!! This was really good, thanks for the laugh! 
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