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Are You there?

 

Always a movement just in front of me

I can feel it right there...

a presence of love, the feelings we share.

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Singing to my soul like a violin plays

with a slow suttle stroke

in the most perpetual ways.

Sometimes I may reach out

for this world is so unforgiving

asking reasons of "Why" I am living.

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When my heart wants to let go

so many times in the night

it brings me to a vision of light.

Easing all this pain that I feel

with its soft spoken words

that helps my soul heal.

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Are you there? I ask...

in a half broken voice

always my friend, for it is my choice.

.

Know I am the Angel

that resides in this place

trying to maintain a firm state of grace.

Too any and all

that walk through my halls

for I am the future when duty calls.

 

 

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  • Touchof1der silver member
    September 7, 2007

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    I must say hat this was enthralling. You took this to heights and places that I had not thought of myself and presented something new and fresh to savor. This makes me want to open up your skull and crawl inside your mind to see what other pearls of pleasure you possess. Such sweet poetry... Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der


    • getsbetter
      September 7, 2007
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      Thank you touch for the wonderful comment, and I am glad you liked it. I have been finding myself trying to put a different take on things as I see them, and measure out the way I normally do. It really seems to give some different outlooks and very different indeed. Again, thank you friend for the beayt comment...GETS


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    September 4, 2007

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    Singing to my soul like a violin plays

    with a slow suttle stroke

    in the most perpetual ways.



    this is a great line here in a purely golden poem, keep it flowing, good luck in the contest


    • getsbetter
      September 7, 2007
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      Thank you for the awesome comment Disturbed, always there for a great comment aren't ya? tHANKS BUDDY!


  • Jalalbad gold member
    September 4, 2007
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    full of beauty

    and duty. Good luck in the contest.
    smile,
    Judy


  • NoWayJo
    September 4, 2007
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    There's such a calm soothing nature to this poem, and I like that by the last stanza that this sensation is justified by it has been written an angel's perspective.

    Nicely written poem, great take on the contest-image, and very best wishes to you in the contest!

    Jo

  • Lovely Love Poet
    September 4, 2007
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    very soothing to me, like a gentle breeze on my chee


  • Midnight Raeven
    September 4, 2007

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    Wow this is beautiful. I loved your imagery and the way you saw that picture is just wow. You are an amazing poetress and I enjoyed reading this poem, I am looking forward to reading more!

    My favorite stanza in this poem was :

    Are you there? I ask...
    in a half broken voice
    always my friend, for it is my choice.

    It just speaks out to me the most in this poem. Wonderfully written with beautiful imagery. Thanks for sharing!

    Always,

    Amadahy


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    Still Wrking are you - will wait till you are done wrking then before adding anything else. Interesting picture, is it not? Will give applauds now, even before you are finished, just because I can. LOL

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