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Jibberish

 Some have said of me that I'm

l i t e r a t e !

Strange but that makes me feel

like literacy wears some super-glued

tattoo required to pass through

into an elitist world of who's who;

some judgmental pathos for seeing things

 the way t h e y need them to be rather

than allowing Truth to bite them in the

nipple-of-reality.

We all know someone who tries to

hype us with Jargonian propheticisms

about anything at all, manipulating

revered passages from acclaimed works

like the Bhagavad Gita or the Yoga Sutras

of Patanjali, or intimidate us by slinging

names we've never heard like a quick-order

cook tossing raw potatoes onto a sizzling skillet

of lardy-lies deep frying our minds so that we

wet ourselves believing Mahatma Gandhi reincarnated

right in our midst.

We, the literate dedicated entirely to impressing

ourselves with our o w n liter-a-c-y

our mental greatness surround ourselves

with surreal props--those likenesses

that mirror back what we perceive and then

p r o j e c t our selves to be.

I abhor elitist thinking, detest flowery shows

and multi-syllabic displays flounting arrays of Thucydides

Pericles, Herodotus, Ranke, Rilke, Rankine, Rousseau--

Henri or Jean-Jacques; those tasty, toasty tidbits

of acclaimed literary genius.

We- the wee-class of humanoidals--how we

continue our own dissection--plucking Indigo

petals from our flowering children, tearing civilization

from the neck and throat of snobbery and literary

grandiosity.

I hate elitism: eclectic, ephemeral, ecclesiastical,

euphemistic, euphoric elitism.

E U T H A N A S I A.............. p l e a s e!

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  • Juno101
    November 2

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    I think you really laid out your thoughts in a very human ranting way, it brings a great point-of-view on things and it shows you have really been thinking about this. Its fearless in its execution and I was very interested and wanted to keep reading but I didn't really find it funny. If I did this would have been really great, for this contest.


  • allfivehorizons
    September 21, 2007

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    Oh this is really nice... I didn't understand a lot of it and I actually like that fact!!! hehe.. Are you indian? Because I am... I recognised Bhagavad Geetha and stuff like that. I thought the flow was a little jerky. Even for free verse, flow is still important. I sort of understand how it falls into Option #4 category. And you did make me smile at points.

    abhor elitist thinking, detest flowery shows
    and multi-syllabic displays flounting arrays of Thucydides
    Pericles, Herodotus, Ranke, Rilke, Rankine, Rousseau--
    Henri or Jean-Jacques; those tasty, toasty tidbits
    of acclaimed literary genius.

    I loved this bit. Thanks for entering. Good luck!


  • heygoo
    September 13, 2007

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    I like here how you explore the curse of labels. I feel your rage at being made out to be high-brow when all you want to be is you. There are some nice phrases of alliteration as well.


  • between slices
    September 6, 2007

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    DAMN!
    you should try out this contest Danna's hosting:
    http://allpoetry.com/contest/2366854
    4 days left..

    ohh... i LOVE this!! it really cracked me up! gosh, i love how your words flow right on into a good rant about how you hate elitism and the label of being "literate"... it's such a headstrong piece!

    "nipple-of reality".. you sure have some rocking images and comparison.. "...quick-order cook tossing raw potatoes onto a sizzling skillet of lardy-lies..." and the mirror projection..
    i also like how you've used "Indigo"... reminds me of the whole plantation episode that happened in India long time back which Gandhi brought a stop to.. we read a chapter on it a few weeks back in English..

    powerful rounding-off with the whole e-lliteration.. though you do have some spelling errors there.. eClectic, euTHAnasia.. and.. Gibberish.. if you wanna be 'literate'

    a really powerful speak-out session i enjoyed being in. love how you've shown ignorance through labellings and casting stereotypes.. really, can't people let people be??

    it's sad...



    • Danna Hobart
      September 6, 2007

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      Thank you CP for pointing her to my contest. This is definitely one of the best pieces entered. It is a smart/quippy write. I love the irony of the piece most of all.

      Thanks for entering.


    • liquidmindforever
      September 6, 2007

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      Good GollyMissMollysure like to Rock

      Dear CrystalPhoenix my dear,

      Thank you for the acclaim to fame in the game
      of "ignorance." I enjoyed myself bashing all the
      fragments of a self-made hypocrisy ironically
      speaking-out.

      LOVE and trophies galore!!!
      lmf


  • luna-midnight gold member
    September 5, 2007
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    this is awsome!
    great job and good luck!
    stephanie

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