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the dog ate my tampon

my mind was racing as he pulled up my dress
his hands on my thong
my hands on his chest
he explored a bit more and what did he see?
Not my beautiful ass but the blood from inside me

how could this happen?
ever confused as i
my tampon had failed me
now he knows its my time

i lifted my dress and to what horror did i find?
the tampon was frozen,it slipped out of my....
but how did it freeze?! i pondered once more
the guy still in shock, my tampon still on the floor

if you think it couldnt get much worse
that my tampon got frozen in my expensive gucci purse
well the story gets to be much much more
for those with weak stomaches
take heed...theres more in store

the dog now barges in
tail wagging, drooling galore
looks to what he thinks is a red popsicle 
while i run for the door

you can only guess what happened next

we never talked again

frozen tampons...what a mess!




 

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  • dave xavier
    December 20, 2007

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    good for bravado.. lemmeseemore, tho..

    I need to read more of your work... to see how a cool lil punk rock girl enjoys shock and awe versus the subtley crafted guise of manipulanguaging on contextual variages throughout her meanderings...

    lemmeseenow... hmmm... okay: there's a rhyming context that could flow better... I wonder how many times did u read it aloud to see how well it phonetically flowed (no pun intended... lol!)


    I enjoyed the slight play on words... like the last line "what a mess" has dual menaings (the relationship that wasn't, and the actual mess from the bloodied incoorigible now (un)sanitary phallic symbol... But that aspect could have been played so much further...

    For instance, I would have LOVED to have seen multiple double-entendre's (oh my how you could have run with them... and u have a few, imho... but u could've REALLY played hard (par instance...)

    k- how's that, dear for a tiptoed introspection? ;-p\

    PS -I loved the poem, overall... It was fun to walk thru those moments with your brain.., So thank-u!


    • american youth
      August 21
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      wow thank you very much!
      yeah maybe i didnt read it aloud haha
      but it did make me giggle!


  • J-Lee18m
    October 8, 2007

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    Lol, that was um... wow... a tad bit disturbing. Keep up the um good work. I have a strong stomach. but how the hell does a tampon get frozen lol.

  • Acidanthra
    September 10, 2007
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    This is too funny!! It is disturbing, but too comical. I really don't know what to say. LOL


    • american youth
      September 11, 2007
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      lol yeah thats what i was hoping to do
      leave people speechless =)
      thanks!


  • flaed
    September 5, 2007

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    thats verry disturbing i liked the first 4 lines
    the second stanza and the second line in the 3rd stanza

    its cute. and...disturbing. nice choice!


  • Blood13Rayne
    September 5, 2007
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    hahahahahhaha. that is fucken hilarious

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